Hi,
I didn't C&C for three reasons:

1)Overly long Author Notes at the beginning and
inadequate disclaimers. IMO, a disclaimer must give
specific and respectful credit to the original
author(s). And I prefer the story to speak for
itself. If the author has to explain things _before_
the story starts, then it's probably an indication
that some editing is in order.  

2)Names. I'm very sensitive about the use of the
original names. 
Once I saw "Madison" instead of "Tomoyo" and "Scouts" 
instead of "Senshi", I quit reading. (I make an
exception for Pokemon names, though I do give extra
credit for anyone who can write a _good_ story using
the originals.) ^_~

3) Real Life has been hammering me lately. Among other
things my wife has been in and out of surgery for a 
rather severe eye problem, so I haven't had much time
or energy for writing or C&Cing.   And I'm afraid that
exhaustion and illness has made the little C&C I have
done overly harsh. :(

Let me make it VERY clear that I only skimmed the
story, so my comments only indicate a very limited and
superficial impression.  Names and author notes are
only a couple of selection tools that I use and this
should NOT be taken as negative criticism.  I
sometimes miss some very good stories , but there are
a lot of fanfics in cyberspace and I can't possibly
read them all. 

That said, let me know if you'd like me to C&C and
I'll try to get to it tonight, as I've some free time.
IF you like my writing style and you're familiar with
and like the way I C&C, then I might be of some use to
you. However, I'm not a very good editor. I make
comments based on the way I would write a story and on
what I like to read. There's a very definite bias in
my C&C, though I make a determined effort to give only
constructive comments.

I look for dramatic tension, smooth, natural sounding
dialogue and well integrated descriptive passages. But
this is ONLY my opinion. I've loved some stories that
no one else even looks at and I've seen some real
�stinkers' (IMHO) get award after award. ^_^ 
If you think I can help, let me know and I'll do my
best. 


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 And, if any is left, I buy food and clothes."-Erasmus

"A man is a small thing, and the night is large 
and full of wonders." -Lord Dunsany

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