And on to something else:

The Only Ones...
by Jim Miller <whonk@xinu.nu>

I don't own Eva, etc, etc.

C&C welcome.


     Shinji Ikari stood glaring at the small, single silhouette figure
high above the purple robot's giant head.  Shinji knew that it was Gendo
Ikari, his only living family.  A man who hadn't seen fit to take the
time to even talk to him on the telephone for over two years.  The same
man who had suddenly sent for him without explanation.

Gendou: Only because it took that long to get the phone working. Do you know
how long it takes to get a repair man out here.

     Shinji spared a moment's thought for the beautiful Captain
Katsuragi.

Feels odd for him to think of her in those terms.

 It had been rather a shock to have her show up on his door

step, urgently requesting his presence.

Hmm. Different way of meeting one another.

 Gendo had planned it, of

course.  He knew that Shinji would be much more willing to go along
quietly with some unknown (and good looking) woman than he would have
with Gendo himself.  He had hoped at first that Gendo had sent his
'Significant Other' in lieu of coming himself.

Seem to be switching POVs in the same paragraph.

     Upon arrival at the huge NERV complex, however, he'd realized that
she was a relative new comer

newcomer

     "At least you finally learned the difference between 'can not' and
'will not'.  In my case, there's no difference.  I will not pilot it
because I can not pilot it.  I can't even drive a car, and you know it.
And you'd be a better person with a little kidding now and then."

Much more defiant Shinji I see.

     "Then you are no use to me.  Leave."

Shinji: Fine, but I'm taking the woman with me. She's a major hottie.

      Shinji looked down at the lined and wrinkled face of the woman in
his arms.  Her one unbandaged eye opened, revealing a startling red orb.
She looked back at him without recognition.  Memories of the same face
in different emotions--happy, sad, thoughtful, angry, passionate--but
younger, with less pallor and brown hair flooded through his mind.
Gradually the face became lined and the hair white until the last was a
still image of peaceful death.  It faded to that of a grave marker:

       Yui Ikari
       1962-2013
       Wife, Mother and Scientist

     Shinji noticed the tears streaming from his eyes only when he
raised his seamed face and white haired head up to look at Gendo again.

"I'll do it, just leave her be.  But I want to know why.  You at least
owe us--me that."

Gendo smiled thinly, "Because you are the only ones who can.... Father."

Hmm. Interesting tournabout.  Don't know much else to say. Nice work.

D.B. Sommer






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