Ginrai wrote:
Time to C&C this...
Brothers Brian and Corwin wrote:
My Brother!
while trying to ignore the intense pain coursing through his body,
and pulling a large, errant thorn from his side. The grotesque
mockery of a female that had cushioned his fall twitched, laughing
shrilly and loudly, before disappearing in a cloud of dust.
When I read the teaser, I thought this was Cologne.
Suggestion noted!
"Stop it, Sailor Paragon!" a brown-haired girl commanded, giving her
First fic ref...
Yep, though it's not nearly as appropriate as the next.
"Yeah, Sailor Temptress," Ranma laughed nervously, tugging on his
That's two.
:)
Disclaimer: Ranma 1/2 is the property of Takahashi Rumiko and Viz
Video. Comic Party is the property of Aquaplus/KSS, those lovely
people who create ecchi date sims for every occasion. Er... or so we
hear.
Heh
The fact that Comic Party was based on a hentai game makes this fic
rather appropriate ^_^
Er... right! We're not a bunch of perverts or nothing, no!
"You spaced out all of a sudden, and had the scariest face..."
Looking at him suspiciously, she questioned, "You were thinking of
something perverted, weren't you!"
Ranma: Trust me, this is _not_ something I _want_ to be thinking of.
Who would?
"So... you both are students of the Anything Goes..." A smile
breaking on his face, the old man drawled out, "Would you like to be
all that you can be... My Students?"
Around where I realized it had Happosai as Taishi... wondering who came
up with that idea ^_^
Menchi. All Menchi. Not me.
atop the bench. "Um, Akane?" he asked. "Should we just go home?"
Akane: And what about school?
Ranma: What ABOUT school?
"Well, not father." The short man rubbed his chin thoughtfully.
"Maybe godfather. I trained your fathers." Smiling at them, he
added, "Would you like to know more?"
Ranma + Akane: No.
(They then both proceed to kick Happosai far away, thus ending the
story.)
Thankfully, that didn't happen ^_^
Starship Troopers ref, Godfather ref, Star Wars ref...
A man wrapped in a mass of bundled rubber hoses pushed his way
through the crowd, loudly asking, "Where do the Urutsokodoji
cosplayers go?" He bumped into Akane, then muttered an apology and
Ah, _that_ type of cosplaying.
And Corwin said no one would get it...
ran past, disappearing into another cluster of people.
past -> past her (I think)
Okay.
The man who had introduced himself as Happosai chuckled. "A whirlwind
of excitement, danger, desire, and FUN, My Students!" Leering, and
'Leering and'
Righty-o.
Happosai easily avoided being hit by the makeshift projectile, and
smirked at her, ignoring the cries of agony behind him, where the
bag had hit some unfortunate bystander. "The Ecchi in you is wild
And knocked off their tentacle costume it seems...
Well... There are a lot of tentacles to go around.
and savage, yet you deny it," he proclaimed sagely. "Until you
become one with your inner pervert, your hormones won't know peace."
Akane: You're just saying that so you see me naked.
Happosai: Why, yes. But--
Akane: (chasing him) DIE!
*snicker*
cosplayers. Determined to get her revenge, Akane followed him,
leaving Ranma standing alone in the center of a small crowd of
onlookers that had gathered around them in the meanwhile.
Girl 1: (Points at Ranma) Hey, isn't that the boy in Kuonji's dojin?
Girl 2: Yeah he is! I wonder if he's as well-hung as the drawn
version.
Girl 1: There's only one way to find out.
(Ranma slowly edges away.)
Heh!
"Hey, I ain't no pervert!" Ranma protested, poking at his chest with
his left thumb for emphasis.
Kurumi: One day that thumb will not be poking _your_ chest.
Ranma: ...
*HAH!*
Kurumi gave him a careful once-over that made the pigtailed boy feel
strangely dirty. "Does not understand this one," she mumbled quietly
to herself. "Yet time he has not." Turning towards Ranma, she called
out to him as the cart started picking up speed, "Denial leads to
delusion. Delusion leads to favoritism. Favoritism leads to bashing.
Bashing leads to the Dark Side."
Well said ^_^
Seems to be the popular quote. ;)
Despite Ranma's best efforts to keep up with the cart, it began to
steadily outrun him. The boy cursed, realizing too late that he
could have asked the girl to help him find the exit. Now, he was
'Now he' - I think
N.... nope.
"Beware the Dark Side of Ecchi," Ranma heard Kurumi call out over her
shoulder as he stopped, breathing heavily and letting his hands rest
on his bent knees to conserve his strength.
Unfortunately for Ranma, Kurumi lead him to the dusty corner of the
convention, where there was a huge table with a banner saying, "Oscar's
Wonderful World of Animals!" on it.
... he'd never make it past the quality monitor.
He finally found a door, and was about to use it, when he caught
himself, frowning at the sign. 'Emergency only', it proclaimed in
glaring kanji.
I don't think the second comma is necessary.
Or it should be: 'Emergency only,'
No, the first one was right. I think.
Will change.
A good thing he didn't go through the door considering who was
watching.
Yes.
"Ya," said the second, both of them addressing someone Ranma couldn't
see yet. "We want der C-ko dojinshi, ya."
"Ahem!" cried out an irate voice. "I don't traffic such filth!"
Man in Beret: Okay, then how about that dojinshi that has you and
Mutsumi?
... Oooh.
The two men leaned forward ominously, the first muttering, "Brudda
Cor, dis woman don wanna give us da ecchi!"
"Meine freund Dur! What shall we do?"
...
I can't believe you did that ^_^;
Merely stand-ins! Stand-ins! We're nothing like our counterparts --
my beret is only one color!
"Feh," the third voice continued, the speaker just coming into
Ranma's point of view. "Dojinshi is like okonomiyaki -- it's got a
Woo-hoo! She's here!
Yes.
proud tradition, and I'm not going to let your eagerness corrupt our
enduring ethics!" Ranma blinked at the girl as he saw her. Long,
brown hair in a pair of ponytails down her back, standing next to
the banner that loudly proclaimed, "Kuonji!" in bold letters.
Ukyou has a different hairstyle here? I'm guessing it's to make her
look a bit like Yuu.
And because she's not trying to dress as a man.
Her eyes lit up when she glanced at him, and she lunged across the
table, pulling him over it and towards her. "Our brother here is a
dangerous man," she warned, tapping the table with a large steel
spatula for emphasis. "Feared the world over for..."
Heh, using the spatula like Yuu used the fan.
Only appropriate. ;)
Apparently, 'Dur and Cor' were frightened, because by the time Ranma
Avid readers of Ukyou's dojin they are.
:)
The girl latched on to him excitedly, pressing herself against him.
"I knew it!" she proclaimed. "I knew you'd come back for me!"
Ah, no feelings of hatred towards Ranma this time.
Chapter two.
Ranma looked at the papers in his hand, reading the cover aloud.
"'The adventures of Ranchan and Ucchan'? What's this?"
"Our dojinshi!" Ukyou responded, blushing even more deeply.
Heh
She forgot the add the 'hentai' part ^_^
I wouldn't say, 'forgot'... ;)
The first pages were kind of lacking, reminding him of Akane's manga,
which bored him to death. Caravan Kidd, now that was the good stuff.
Hmm... third Ranma fic you had a small CK cameo I believe.
*Ginrai needs to find out more about that series*
Um... Shoot. I never put one in PoE...
UC, IJnR, H-PA, BoC...
Though it seems she still has her great dislike for Genma here ^_^
Well... her teacher explained some of that away... Hehe...
I think one of the manga arcs did show that Ukyou was good in drawing,
so not at all much of a surprise here.
'The Trouble with Emas'?
Continuing on, he watched the picture-girl throw herself onto the
picture-Ranma, thanking him and telling him in no uncertain terms
that her body was his to do with as he pleased. Ranma stared at that
panel for a very long moment, before flipping to the next page. He
Ranma: Will the next page be something similar to when we were
wrestling on the hill?
Ukyou: Well... sort of.
Hehe!
This has to be hell for her.
Much like Mizuki.
the distance, but she couldn't reach any of them -- indeed, no
sooner would she draw near one than the crowd would spin her about,
than -> that (?)
than --then really...
Akane blinked, staring in surprise. Tofu? Here? Well, he was a
doctor, nothing like the otaku that surrounded her -- but if she
And the thought that Tofu could be anything like those around her was
inconceivable to Akane.
As it was to most readers before we inflicted this on them. :)
the woman's presence in their midst. Trailing shortly behind her, in
a much smaller, yet still present envelope of solitarily, was an
unmistakable man in the same gi she remembered far too well to forget.
I assume that's Tofu.
Will clarify.
"Why else would I be here?" the doctor asked, tucking the stack of
manga into his gi somewhere.
Akane: Here's one more.... Why's this one so sticky?
... eww...
Hanging her head, Akane whimpered, "I don't like this... I want to go
home!"
Akane the Mizuki...
And now Akane the Shinji...
There was the EVA ref when Taishi explained that the chances of
findiner her again were .000000.... something %.
"Yep," she announced, beaming at him. "And don't you forget, you
_are_ my fiancee."
Ranma: (blinking) You know that I have a girl curse?
Ukyou: (handing him the dojinshi) Yup, read page 32.
(Ranma turns to page and suddenly faints as more blood gushes from his
nose)
Ukyou: Then again, that probably wasn't a good idea...
Heh...
"Yep! Your father engaged us, and I decided to sell dojinshi about us
to educate the world about our love!"
Smart girl...
Er... some would argue. :p
Tofu flipped through the manga, and Akane peeked over his shoulder to
study it. She looked away again, very quickly. The artist had done a
reasonable job of guessing what Ranma looked like, to have drawn him
'like to' - I think
Uh... not sure.
naked in that much detail. The doctor made a thoughtful noise, and
Considering that she has experience with that...
Of course.
flipped the manga shut, returning it to the girl. "A little bit much
for someone who's not used to it," Tofu admonished. "These things
need to be built up to, you know. Make a man jump into something
like that with no preparation, it's no wonder he loses it all three
pages before the money shot!"
Hehehe
My only real contribution to the chapter. :p
I'll let Corwin respond to the points on his sections himself. :)
Glad you guys are working on it (hopefully chapter 2 will be started on
soon ^_^). Very funny fic.
Schedules allowing -- it took us about 4 months to get this much.
Hopefully our new system will work better, though. :)
Can only imagine what'll happen in the next chapter (for some reason I
keep getting images of someone cosplaying as a tentacled Barney).
.... I used to be able to sleep at nights.
Thanks for the C&C!
Ginrai