Hmm... I was literally just wondering idly when the next chapter of this
fic would come out when I checked my mail and saw it...

On with the C&C...

On Mon, 07 Jan 2002 19:10:00 -0700 Slacker <rheins@pmt.org> writes:

Disclaimer:  I own NOTHING.  No, seriously.  I'm college student.
I literally own nothing.  Among the many things I do not own are
Ranma 1/2, which is owned by Viz, Rumiko Takahashi, and several
large corporations who could grind me under their heels.  I also
do not even come CLOSE to owning Sailor Moon, as their mini-
skirted likenesses are owned by Kodansha, Naoko Takeuchi, and
whichever American company has decided to buy the rights to it so
they can slaughter the translations.  (Cousins?  *snort*)

Anyways, just read the fic.  Please?

Well, since you asked so nicely...

******************
All the Small Things--Chapter 8

A Sailor Moon/Ranma 1/2 X-over

By: Slacker (rheins@pmt.org)
******************

         "Her precognition has altered.  Every Chaos mage has some
kind of precognition.  My father knew the exact time, place, and
method of his death since the moment he was born.  I'm a
psychometric.  Mara always dreamt of her next kill.  It never let
her sleep well."  Nemesis explained.

I would imagine not... in fact, with something like that, assuming Mara's
personality was like Hotaru's, I owuld be surprised if she didn't attempt
suicide a few times. 

         "Hey, she wants to keep me from my daughter.  At least I
didn't do anything to her.  Yet."  Nemesis said nonchalantly.
"Anyways, there was a different reason I came back here."

The period after Yet should be a comma.

         "Well, now YOU could use some."  Setsuna retorted as she
reclined on the bed.  "So what did you want?"

         "Just came to tell you I'm gonna be gone for a bit."
Nemesis replied.

Same problem with these... periods ending the quotations should be commas
since they're followed by a speech indicator.  I noticed this a few other
times, but I own't point out each one.
 

         "By my blood and power, I swear I will protect her.  I swear
it by my name and my heritage.  I will not let her come to harm.
My blood before hers, my life before hers."  Nemesis let three
drops of blood fall onto the pristine white of the pillar.  As
soon as the third drop hit, he felt the effects as his Oath
settled on him.

Ooh... interesting.  Very interesting.

         Nemesis lifted an eyebrow.  "Problems, Deus?"

         "No, Dave.  I can detect no problem.  It must be human
error."  Deus calmly announced.  Nemesis twitched.

         "Don't do that."

         "Daisy, Daisy, give me your answer true...."  Deus began to
sing in a distorted tone.

         "Damn it!  Stop that!  It's creepy!"  Nemesis yelled.  Deus
chuckled.

That whole sequence is just too amusing...

         They were cats.  Sort of.  They resembled your common big
cat like a child's toy tank resembled a M1-A1 Abrams.  That is to
say, small, weak, and pitiful.  All of the cats were colored the
same jet black.  Each of them had a mouth full of needle-sharp
teeth.  All had the same insane gleam in their red eyes.  The six
legs each possessed ended in long, wickedly jagged claws.  And
every last one of them was at least twelve feet tall at the
shoulder.  And they all looked very, *very*, *VERY* angry.

This should be fun... ;)

         And he realized:  he couldn't stop it.  He couldn't even
slow it down.  The screams of the other Senshi were whispers on
the wind as he accepted the only way he could fulfill his oaths
to his Queen.  In the fractions of seconds available to him, he
reached deep inside himself, past all his skills, all his
knowledge, all his techniques.  He reached deep into the dark
portion of his mind that was no longer his.  The mentally blocked
and walled part of his brain that held his greatest fear.  The
part he had reinforced with his magic as soon as he had
remembered how.  And with a mental twist, he broke the locks, and
ripped down the walls.  And the Neko-ken came howling out,
screaming to kill, rend, and destroy.

         And everything went...crimson.

Nemesis... in the Neko-ken... ow.

Let me say that again.  Ow.  This will not be pretty.

To be continued......
******************
Author's Notes:

         Sometimes, I even hate myself for writing cliffhangers.

         Then I realize:  I *LIKE* cliffhangers.  And instantly, I
feel better.  Of course, I usually receive a wide (and rather
inventive) series of death threats after one, but that's pretty
cool, really.

I wish I got death threats when I wrote cliffhangers.  It would mean that
people were actually reading my stuff...

I intended to give you an imaginative death threat, but I'm too lazy to
type it up.  But, it involved bubblegum and an overripe bannana.  The
remainder is left as an excercise for the reader.
 
Apologies for the paucity of comments, but I really didn't find that much
to nitpick on, and my Muse of Humorous Comments is awol at the moment.

Now, get to work on Chapter 9! ;)


           Aaron Nowack
"Never let reality get in the way of a good hypothesis."
http://www.geocities.com/anowack/
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