Start: 7:23 p.m., 30/12/2001
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In Silence

by Raye Johnsen
raye_j@yahoo.com

<snip>

	I do hate him, now.  I hate him - but only because
there was a time when I thought I loved him.  But now,
I think I loved the image of him that I built inside
my head.  He simply saw it and slipped inside my
dreams.  Ironic - after I was sure I had thrown all my
dreams away, he slid so neatly into the one I had
clung to so tightly I didn't even realize I still had
it.

Hm. Yeah, she was mortified and all... though, really... she was an unfortunately tragic character to begin with. I saw a mile away she was going to do what she did when I first watched her appear in GK. ^^;

	And how important is that? I asked, bitterly.  How
many missions depended on the Gate of Protection,
rather than Ukiya's Gate of Wind, or Ruriko's Gate of
Life?  Even the Gate of *Illusion* is more important
to AEGIS.

Reminds me of the episode where she keeps on hounding Reiko's ineptittude of her use of the Gate of Illusion. ^^;

	Methinks she's being hard on herself, given how rarely the Gate of 
Illusion ever actually worked out.

But you have to admit, it has rarely been used if at all.

	His Gate was black.  Mine is not - it's still green. 
Which proves to me that this darkness at the bottom of
my heart is not imposed, as it was on Ruriko, nor is
it a madness, as it was with him, but a part of me. 
Which means that it will never go away.

Er... her gate became black, methinks. She chose to... that's how she was able to 'use' her gate the way she could.

	Well, I'm afraid I can't offer any constructive criticism on this 
one, other than that one comment. It's probably a little deeper than 
Megumi was ever meant to go, but I think on its own, this work is 
just about perfect.

I beg to disagree... that Megumi was about just that, really. ^^ It explains nicely her (though somewhat limited) POV on things... why Kageyama affected her as such, and why she did what she did. It's apt and deep enough as is. ^^


General Comments: The prose (if it could be called that) worked great, even sans quotations. Actually, it even flowed more smoothly, if that's possible. 

The first person POV for Megumi, as I said already, remains apt and not actually going anything beyond her, really. Quite... heh... canon (oveused word, that). Anyway, nice character fic. Cheers!


Ja!
Abdiel

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