From: ffml-bounce@anifics.com [mailto:ffml-bounce@anifics.com] On Behalf
Of Brian Welch

Are you just waiting to see more, or
was it so messed up canonically that you don't know
where to begin? ^_^;

I saw this fic when you posted it to Fanfiction.net. Back then I didn't
get into it because I don't like the link to norse mytholoogy. Since I
downloaded it, I decided to go through it anyway. 
By setting it in Heaven, of which little has been shown, and 150 years
into the future, you've sidestepped most nitpicking. I still don't see
how this connects AMG to norse mythology though.
I am unsettled on a major premise however. More on that below.

I also think you could have cut down on chapter 1. Most of the things we
learned about Eric then was repeated again in the following chapters.

"Nidhog and Yggdrasil share data.  There was a problem

with the synchronization between the two systems, so I
fixed it."<<

I'd disagree with you on this part. While it is all but certain that
Yggdrasil controls reality, I doubt Nidhog controls more beyond the
demons' influence. By this I mean the condition of the Demon realm,
Demonic contracts and the demons' access to information and magical
power. If Nidhog was as influential on reality as Yggdrasil, the demons
would have used it to overrun reality long ago.
I tend to think of Nidhog as a rouge network. Once it was part of
Yggdrasil, then the demons took it over and severed its links to the
main system. They used it to create their own plane of existence and
maintained covert links to Yggdrasil so they could spread their
influence.

Another point is you did not make it clear whether Eric successfully
placed his worm into Yggdrasil or not the first time.

That's all I have to say for now. Keep writing.

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