--- Abdiel <gab_ab@edsamail.com.ph> wrote:
A very compelling read. Though it had answered
several questions, it had opened up some new ones...
perhaps to be tackled on another time, eh? ^^
Part 1 is just an intro, really. Some of the loose
threads will be tying up by the end of Part 2.
It
certainly ended with a sombering note... though it
wasn't mostly a sombering piece in certain parts. A
serious fic, with light hints of humor here and
there.
Yeah, and I hate writing angst. It goes against my
grain, but this first part had to be that way. The
rest of the fic will be lighter, I promise!
Your extensive knowledge of both Norse Mythology,
the AMG manga and various other related material has
helped create a concise, intact, canonical and
fascinatingg piece. Though, at first I was a bit
wary of how Donovan was shaping up (y'know... the
usual Author-Avatar phobia I gat for these new
characters that suddenly become the focus of a fic
because of their 'oh, so amazing powers, and getting
the affection of various goddesses for no apparent
reason, etc.), but it seems my fears were for naught
as Eric Donovan appears no more an overpowered
Self-Insert as Keiichi would be... meaning he was
well-rounded enough and had certain flaws in him
that mke him human and believable enough to work.
The specific abilities Eric "acquires" are vital plot
points, and I had a devil of a time demonstrating them
without making him come across as a complete jerk. In
my first few drafts Eric was definitely the
oh-so-amazing author avatar who everyone hopes gets
run over by a bus in the next paragraph! ^_^;
He mutated on me, though, and now he's mostly his own
character.
Your certain style of meshing thought with narration
was... curious, at first, but it wasn't anything
that one cannot get used to. ;) In fact, it seems to
have the ability to engage the reader into the fic
more, without all the contraints of having one POV,
since your Multi-POV seemed to be structured enough
to be deemed intelligible.
I wish ASCII had native italics! *sniff* This fic will
probably have to be HTML-ized to make it more legible.
A lot of the AMG script, especially Keiichi's, is in
thought. I wanted to keep that feel and tried
numerous formats for all those quips and introspective
parts, but finally just gave up. The formatting got
in the way, there was so much of it. I'm glad I
didn't lose you completely in the mechanics of thought
vs. description.
I lack much knowledge in Norse mythology to make
judgement, but everything seems to be in proper
place... meaning what more/less of the Norse myths
you've presented had more/less meshed smoothly with
whatever there is to mesh with in the AMG universe.
It's a given, I was a bit lost on the more
techinical aspects, but everything was wel-enough
placed to confirm authenticity and realness... a
well thought-out, well-researched work, to say the
least. The fact that there's more to be discovered
yet still provokes a lot of thought... and
anticipation for the latter parts. :)
Those who know me know I'm a hopeless overanalyzer
when it comes to the AMG manga and an untiring
defender of its ties to the original Norse. ^_^
Part 2 is in the works. I'll put the chapters up here
on the ML as each nears final draft. They'll be
rougher than Part 1, so feel free to hack away when
they come out.
Thanks for your kind words!
Brian
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