Elektra?  You used Elektra for Shampoo?  Apart from her relationship to 
"Daredevil" that's a pretty bad fit.  Elektra got her name for two 
reasons.  She's Greek, and she was just a little bit _too_ attached to 
her father.  Her whole original motivation was to avenge her doting 
father's death, and of course Elektra was her real name.  Now Shampoo 
isn't Greek, and doesn't have a father complex, and is working for a 
Japanese ninja cult, so where'd she get the name?  Me, I'm thinking 
"Black Widow" would be a better one.  It's another Daredevil 
ex-supervillain martial artist girlfriend, and all you have to do is 
give her a dead husband, you can justify it.  

Meanwhile if everyone is going to keep misinterpreting Whizzer's name, 
shouldn't someone ask about why Elektra isn't throwing lightning bolts?

reserved than in her normal housekeeping role. Some of the things she 
said
made even him blush.

What do you mean "even him"?  Tofu isn't given to risque speech, and 
blushes when Kasumi says, "Would you like a cookie?".

"Geez, you guys don't know when to give up." He hefted a set of
interconnected seats over his head and threw them at the security 
personnel
as though he was in kindergarten playing a vicious version of musical

Security personnel?  Do you mean airport security?  Wouldn't they have 
long since retreated and left it to the cops?  

"Sorry to disappoint you." The speedster seemed to have an affinity to 
talk
excessively. Hawkeye used this to her advantage as she regained her 
bearing

affinity with
tendency to

her footsteps even with his heightened hearing. But no one could sneak 
up on
the 'man without fear'; not even an ant. Forewarned, Daredevil had time 
to

Why do ants sneak up on him?  

He stared in awe at bouquet and told Power Man, "Look, she must like me 
a
lot. She's given me flowers and already gotten to first base."

I don't get that joke.  When did she get to Whizzer's first base?

A fist met the top of his head, one with five times he force he 
mustered
when doing the same thing to the large man.. 

Now, that's plain clumsy even ignoring the typographical error.

What brings you here?" the Iron Rose asked, using her loudspeakers.

She has more than one?  Hmmm.  Where exactly on the armour are they?
If she wants that stereophonic effect presumably they'd be...

"I did see upon the television scenes of carnage delivered by those who
would seek to do others harm. I took it upon mineself to alleviate the 

<wince>  And what's worse, is that Thor's grammar is just as bad in the 
source material. 

in every step. The Iron Rose followed in her wake, paying close 
attention to
her helmet's sensors and keeping a lookout for trouble.

"sensors to keep a lookout for trouble" perhaps?  They aren't two 
separate things she's doing.

there was so little difference between them. They had no respect for 
the law
or authorities, acting like a bunch of American cowboys and causing 

Or bandit samurai, for that matter.

problem. During one of his visits, her father's old friend had once
mentioned the difficulties with heroes in the United States and what

Given that Japan has or is getting almost all the Marvel universe 
American heroes, one wonders what the United States of this universe 
has.

Kodachi's taste. She could understand the interest the goddess seemed 
to
have for the archer. 

Especially since Thor is distinctly on the butch side...to the point of 
have a male name.  

So we should travel to thine headquarters?" Thor asked.

Agh.  Can't stand it!  "thy headquarters".  

"That wont' be necessary. I can summon it here with my armor. The tools 
I
need to modify the  equipment will be onboard."

"won't"

that far surpass the average layman. Modifying the sensor systems 
aboard the
quinjet will be simplicity itself for one of my numerous talents.
Ohohohohoho!"

Doesn't that make her ears ring when she does that inside that helmet?  
Or does it have an open mouth?  

One last thought.

Shouldn't at some point Thor announce that she's going to avenge 
Hawkeye and Whatshisname?  Gotta establish the name, you know.  It's 
traditional.

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