"Flores, Stiffanie Junne K." <stiffaniejunne.flores@ph.unisys.com>
wrote:

His dream of a perfect life was coming true. What was that word again?  Oh
yeah.  Contentment.

He closed his eyes and smiled.

Um. Well. :) Not sure what to tell you. It was a really nice piece of
writing. This might have made a really nice *ending* for a fic. But on
its own, well... contentment, while nice for the characters in question,
is just not that interesting to read about, IMO. The dramatic tension,
the feeling that something *might* go badly, just isn't there. I'm not
saying that they have to threaten to break up, or pull weapons on each
other, or anything like that. It can be something as subtle as a hurt
feeling that might go unresolved.

Anyhow, as I said, it was quite well-written, and hopefully other
readers will find it more to their tastes than I did. Keep writing!


Gary Kleppe
http://www.akane.org/gary/comics.html
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