Over all - Impressive spamfic.

Great Job.

"That kid you ran over?  She didn't survive.  Neither did you."  Priss
saw Nene's smile in the rear view mirror.  "On the up side, I only have
to deliver one more criminal to justice before I retire...forever."

It took me a few minutes to figure out who that 'kid' was. Even if you
didn't mean for it to be her...

Who else rides a scooter?


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