On Mon, Nov 12, 2001 at 01:15:00AM +0000, Kevin Callahan wrote:
As I was walking home again I put my hands in my pockets and
<Kevin> the other one flicking a cigarette?
<Kathrine> Isn't that ironic, Madoka?
Well, no... He just said that she wouldn't have healthy babies, and he,
after all, can't have babies... :P
Hikaru-chan would
<Kathrine> cry, whine, bitch, and be generally annoying?
<Madoka> That'd be in character, so therefore we must assume not.
Tut tut... Even your MST victim here manages to avoid stooping to character
bashing.
She is
always wearing clothes that don't show off her body, but she is
very well developed.
<Kevin> Ok, I'm sorry, but time for some serious commenting.
<ALL> Awwwwww....
<Kevin> This is blatantly not true. Madoka was wrong. You need to
see the series. This should be a basic prerequisite to any
fanfiction, but especially lemons. If you want to actually write,
then please, study the characters. PLEASE. This now concludes the
Fanfiction Public Service Announcement. We now return you to your
regularly scheduled MiST.
Actually, Kyousuke makes a quite similar comment in one of the manga
stories, so it's kind of hard to say that this is out of canon.
Whether or not the author was taking inspiration from the manga or not,
though, is an open question...
Finally she took my slip off.
<ALL> Bwahahahahaha...
<Kevin> He's wearing a slip?
<Madoka> I know Kyosuke is weird, but that's just...
Heh. A Freudian slip, perhaps? :)
Then, suddenly, violently, the door opened. "Oh my god !" I thought,
"This must be Hikaru-chan's mother, what should I say, she'll
kill me ! She must think I'm a monster."
<Madoka> It came from the radioactive wasteland of post World War 2
Hiroshima... It's KYOZILLA!
"Kasuga-kun ?!" "A-Ayuk..."
In other words, this is the cue for the threesome to start?
Actually, aside from being a typical lemon, I think that the main problem
with this fic was that English isn't the author's first language. Maybe I'm
just being idealistic, but I don't really think that you should expect the
same standards from an ESL author as from a native English author, and I
have indeed seen worse English from native speakers. :(