--- Jonathan Rosebaugh <skip@plover.net> wrote:
It works, I suppose. The fic needs only a bit of
cleaning up in the
technical area: grammar, sentance structure, and so
forth.
As an explanation for Jusenkyo, I find it lacking.
I'm supposed to
believe that this sorceress can't either heal her
family or find new
people somewhere on the earth, yet she can create
Jusenkyo?
Also, why a locking pool? The only water-based
objects that are known
to lock a curse are the bucket and kettle (sorry,
can't be bothered to
look up the names right now) owned by the Musk
Dynasty.
All in all, I think I prefer the theories of
Jusenkyo set forth by
Alan Harnum's "Waters Under Earth" or Nicholas
Leifker's "Flesh and
Blood".
well, not going anywhere with it, and I agree it's NOT
good...just something I put down to write
something....and meant to have the locking and
unlocking pools destroyed and replaced with the ladle
and kettle but forgot...
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