Subject: [FFML] Re: [CCS][Pokemon][Urotsukidoji][Lemon] An Interesting Halloween
From: "Lawrence Chu" <lawrence@sandwich.net>
Date: 10/27/2001, 3:47 PM
To: "XStylus" <ranma@cts.com>, <ffml@anifics.com>

.....*FACEFAULT*

Hilarious story, with one nitpick that didn't bug me until JUST now...

    Continuing right along, they noticed that it was getting late, due
mostly in part to them spending in excess of four hours and twenty
minutes
in the public restroom doing something other than having hot steamy
chocolate covered sex. So they decide to wrap it up with just one more
house. As they knock on the door, they are horrified to see a large
tentacled 'creature' dripping with some sort of strange ooze emerge
from the
household. The creature gave Sakura and Ash a lemon. The pair look at
each
other blankly, then at the monster inquisitively.

Half of this paragraph is done in the present tense, while the rest of
the paragraph (and story) are done in the past.  If you ever decide to
revise the story, that's the only thing I think you'd have to change.

^_^

Lawrence

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