Well strictly speaking I only have one comment so that should be [C]

Sent: 08 October 2001 20:01
Subject: [FFML] [FFML][Ranma][Fanfic] Wheel of Fire Special #6: The Hunters

  Nekurow's head lowered slightly, and he smiled
slyly.  Ranma didn't like the look of it.  "Then it is
agreed," he proclaimed.  "You will be compensated
half up-front, with the other half after the demons are
taken care of."

  Monetary compensation, however, was the last thing on
Ranma's mind.

OK, here he's suspicious - but he thinks he could be helping
Shizuka

  Word got out on the street that Ranma was actually
looking for Shizuka, and someone who knew her
eventually passed the word to her, it seemed.  She
called earlier that day on the phone, requesting he
come in person to a very public location.  When he
named the place she only gave an affirmative, the time
to meet, and hung up the phone.

  Ranma had no intention of tipping-off Nekurow until
he heard Shizuka's side of the story.

Here he wants to hear her side of the story.

  "I commend you for drawing her out," Nekurow said
quickly, keeping his eyes on Shizuka as she scrambled
away from the fountain.  "Now, the other comes.  Deal
with him."

  Ranma produced the transmitter in his pocket, and
stared at it for several heartbeats.  He knew he didn't
activate it....

Here he's been stitched up.

  Before he decided to intervene, a rush of wind
violently spiraled into existence.  Ranma braced
himself against the sudden blast, knowing it came from
above.  Holding his arm to his eyes to shield from
the dust, he scanned the area for the new attacker,
suddenly feeling his presence behind him.

  "I don't believe we've met, lackey," the newcomer
said, dressed in a plain baggy T-shirt and jeans.  He
wore an unmarked, plain baseball cap over his head,
with a slightly darkened part where some kind of logo
patch used to be, and held a rising sun fan over his
face.  Snapping it shut, Ranma knew that this was the
one Nekurow was having trouble with.

  "What're you to this?" the martial artist asked.

  "Ziel Kagura, the Wind-User!" the newcomer proclaimed
proudly.  He thrust his folded fan in Ranma's
direction.  "Your paltry rising dragon wave doesn't
mean a damn thing to my power!"

  "Oh, so you've looked me up?" Ranma replied, feeling
cocky.  He tensed himself for combat.  "Knowing is a
whole lot different than experiencing!"

  Ranma took the initiative, and powered for his first
blow with his right fist.  Rushing the opponent, Ranma
threw the first punch, intending to wipe off the
haughty grin from Ziel's face.

And here he's straight into combat without the slightest
attempt to a) confront Nekurow over his trickery, b) try
to convince Zeil that they don't have to be on opposite
sides or c) apologise to Shizuka for stuffing up.

Admitedly neither a,b or c would have been likely to
_work_ but I'm disappointed in Ranma that he didn't _try_
them.

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