death, and had become even more sensitive to it since the birth of the
children. Besides, he wanted to return to their home as well and prepare.

   That last sentence seems awkward, but I'm not sure what to suggest.

Me either. Seems okay to me.

    Just seems kind of stilted. He's going to go home and prepare what?
Maybe some commage? Not sure...

I was tempted to reply on this last time - but it hardly seemed worth it for
one sentence.  As you're still hashing it out ...

I agree that it seems a little awkward.  How about ...

  'Besides, he also wanted to return to their home and prepare.'

I think it was the 'as well and prepare' that struck me as odd.
In fact it would probably work if you just drop the 'as well' and
don't make any other changes.

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