David Lindquist wrote:

  Eh... this C&C is not late. It's on time. Really. ^_^;;

*Six years,* I thought as I hopped off the train car before it stopped at the Nerima station.

That's how long it 's been . Six long, hard years, but the only good thing to come from it was I now know who I loved. Love more than anything in the world. Akane Tendo.
*I wonder if her cooking has been declared a chemical
weapon yet?* Then I sighed. *Even her cooking would be
better than a year of 'bleah' prison food.*

  Why separate the thoughts from the prose, here? Since it's first person, aren't the * unneccesary?

A quick sprint takes me away from the tracks before anyone can notice how I left the train. It would definitely be a bad thing if I got thrown in jail on my first day back. I smiled slightly as a vision of her filled my mind. 

  Wait, which tense are you using? The first sentence looks a little awkward...

My heart started to race and I decide that I have to see her now. Hold her in my arms and tell her that I love her before something else keeps us apart.

  Decide -- decided (?)

So I begin to hop the roofs. Some people actually see me and I hear snippets of their reaction.

  Begin -- began (Which tense are you using?)

"Who is that?!?"

"Aw man, I wish I could do that!"

"That sure looked like Ranma Saotome but that's impossible. I heard he's ..."

  Saotome but -- Saotome, but

"I don't know who he is but he sure is cute!"

  is but -- is, but

A part of me wants to shout out ' Sorry, I' m spoken for!' but it dies when I see my destination.  The front gate of the dojo.
I land on the last roof and almost start down when the gate opens and..I see her.

  ' Sorry, -- 'Sorry (Extra space)

Her hair is longer and she looks older but it's her. She's wearing jeans and a T-shirt that fit her perfectly.

  fit -- fits (?)

  Ranma: I'm not sure why she's carrying the shotgun, though.

*God, she 's more beautiful than ever.*

  she 's -- she's (extra space)

I watch her as she looked back shouted:

  back shouted -- back, and shouted -- back and shouted -- etc.

The male voice that called back took me by surprise. The man that comes out a few seconds later I don't recognize at all.

* I wonder who that is? Must be Kasumi's husband or something.*

  I sense much pain to arrive shortly...

"Hey idiot! Aren't you forgetting something?"

  Hey idiot -- Hey, idiot

Her yell brings him to an instant stop then he turned around and ran back to her.

  brings/turned -- brought/turned (or) brings/turns [ran -- run] (You need to be consistent in tenses)

"Sorry, " I heard him say, "Sigh. what would I ever do without you?"

  Sorry, " -- Sorry," (Extra space)

"What indeed?" Akane replied, cocking an eyebrow that reminded me of Nabiki.

  The eyebrow reminded him of Nabiki? Or the expression?

"Probably be a complete moron. Well, bye honey."

  bye honey -- bye, honey (Or should that be capitalized, since it's being used in lieu of a proper name?)

*What did he call her?!??!* I thought as they moved closer together.

Then they kissed........

and my world shattered.

  Suggest:

  and -- ...and

Why didn't you wait?

  Akane: Because time waits for no woman!

Disclaimer:Ranma 1/2 is owned by Rumiko Takahashi and Viz. All non Ranma characters are mine. All rights reserved.

Coming soon.(hopefully)

  Very hopefully. :p

  I'd like to see more of this! Just straighten out your tenses, and you could have a real winner.