PRA wrote:

A quick comment on this paragraph, while I await the second
part of this chapter, as most of the important stuff has already been
mentioned at least once already:

Okay,

to the ground. All that remained of the mysterious wave of pain was a
sort of scratchy feeling inside her head, similar to the leftover
remnants of a hangover several hours old, just a tiny bit of
queasiness that was surely drifting away.

Nabiki: (Smirking) How exactly would _you_ know what a hangover feels
like?  Hmmm, sis?

Kasumi: You know how I go to that 'Nerima Housewives' organization every
Thursday night?

Nabiki: Yes.

Kasumi: What it mostly consists of isn't trading recipies and sewing tips.
Usually we go out to male strip bars and get sloshed.

Kasumi: (Blushing in embarrassment, while fidgeting with her
apron.)  Err, that is, well, uhm.  Remember the time I told
everyone I was sick and father decided to call Dr. Tofu here
to cheer me up?

Kasumi: We played blackjack for five yen a hand. I'm ashamed to admit, I was
naughty and gambled.

Just how naughty was Kasumi the one time she tried something?

Not that naughty. It's mentioned later.

I get the feeling that there is an interesting flashback or
side story further explaining Kasumi's adventure somewhere in future
chapters.

Nah. Just some things she got talked into doing by a close friend, and only
naughty from her POV, and really only one time each.

Besides, I can't wait to see how the Tendo's react to Kasumi's
'disappearance', and to see if Akane'll go back into Tofu's lab
looking for Kasumi.

Akane's as blanked out as everyone but Kasumi. Had she been Thor it might
have been different, but she wasn't.

 What would Happen to Akane's high opinion of Dr.

Tofu if she were to find Kasumi's underwear and torn blouse on the
floor, but no Dr. Tofu or Kasumi there?

Well, that won't be good, but there's no chance of that happening as you'll
see in the second half of this.

  (I suppose it could turn into

a variant of the 'Good guys battle each other due to a
misunderstanding', but the Nerima weirdness factor would probably at
least keep it fresh and interesting.)

A bit early for that sort of thing, if I choose to go that route. I'm still
in the setting up stages here. Heck, Ryouga's been out of it for nearly five
chapters now, poor guy. He really got lost this time. Hmm. Probably should
have shown where he was. In hindsight, probably should have put it in the
beginning of the chapter. Maybe I'll stick on the end for sending out
purposes, then throw it in after Mousse's bit at the start.

Now, like all true believers, I'll just have to wait impatiently for
the next issue to magically appear in my local inbox, and endlessly
speculate about what direction the story will take next.

One of the prereaders is in the military, so things might be delayed a
little while. But not too long. Don't worry about that.

Thanks for the comments.

D.B. Sommer


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