Very good...but I'd suggest a careful rereading, to catch stuff like...

PansutoTarou5925@aol.com wrote:

Besides, only a dunce would have realized that the wall of
swirling darkness advancing upon them was a bad thing.

...unliess incoming walls of swirling darkness are generally a good
thing in this altverse.  ^_^;;;

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