DB Sommer wrote:

And here we go again. A nice short one:

  I still can't complain. I love getting C&C!

   [Chime: One]

The damn Grandfather clock was broken again. It was really ten o'clock.

  No respect... no respect, I tell you.

  I should make you read IaB.

Dreams again.

   He wasn't lost -- never as he had been.

Ah. Ryouga, most likely.

  Bean Bandit: Uh... yeah. That's right, Ryouga.

But this time... he didn't know where he was.

When one is lost, usually they don't.

   Oddly, he still had no real sense of being _lost_... just not
knowing where he was.

As opposed to being -lost-.

  Stylistic. If you aren't going anywhere, and have nowhere to be... how can you be lost?

  That was a rhetorical question.

He wasn't certain how such a thing could be... so it must have been
a dream.

Or he suffered a blow to the head and is concussed. Or maybe drugged.

  Likely both.

[Fate's Question]

[DB's Answer: Two]

  Wrong! Failed by one point. You don't get into Todai this year, either.

Three sisters surrounded him, each in turn shifting to the last,
boggling him.

Eww. Ogling or some other word than 'boggling'

  'Ogling' means something entirely different.

  How about 'Baffling'?

"What do you want with me?"

"Pull my finger," the one in the middle offered.

  *sigh*

  If I didn't know you any better, I'd be offended.

They froze, becoming static.

He hit the side of the television screen. They started moving again.

  Right.

  Note to self: Surreal fics go straight to the website.

The eldest spoke first. "We simply need you to make a choice, poppet."

They're British? Always thought only Brits used that term.

  Traditionally, they're anything. I just wanted to use something _old_, and Latin wouldn't really work.

Not that he'd allow himself to believe that, anymore. It wasn't

do you need the comma?

  Yes.

And with it, his feet, though never as far as he once had traveled.

Awkward. Not sure what you're trying to say there.

  Will reword.

How many chances, he wondered, to change a life?

Three. After that, you're out.

  What about 42?

[Crone]

Dr. Claw (from Get Smart): Not Crone! Clone! Clone! You never listen to what
I say.

  Not familiar with that reference, I'm afraid...

"We can let you grow in ways you had thought closed to you forever."

Man: You mean you can enlarge my winkie?

Woman: Not a chance. We meant other kinds of emotional growth.

Man: Emotional growth. Bah! Only a woman would think of that crap. I want a
big winkie.

  Aaron Nowack made that same joke. Maybe I should consider rewording that part...

[Hero's answer]

He'd blow himself up and die in spectacular fashion.

Oops, wrong hero. I thought you ment 'Hiro' from Wing Gundam. Never mind.

  Don't watch Yaoi Wing, I'm afraid... :p

Hm... what to say? And here you thought that I hated Ryouga.

A pity, then. I know there's no character I dislike, and it definitely makes
for better writing, IMO.

  No worries, any more work on the CP side-stories, or the rest of the CP fics will be posted directly to websites from this point on.

Nice little introspective piece on Ryouga from the CP universe. Short and
surreal, but not too much so. Sorry I couldn't say more about the grammar.
Didn't find any problems with it, really.

  Well, thanks for your time.

D.B. Sommer