Interesting - nice and dark, but short! Which sometimes works. Seemed slightly hurried, but otherwise the ideas were nicely conveyed.

You may / may not get too may reviews on this only because the formatting of the fic turned out pretty bad in the email. Looks as if you cutted and pasted into the body of your message. Maybe try attaching a txt file, hitting return after every 15-20 words or so, and resending.

Good writing ;)


- Kus Kus
http://www.kuskus.org/



----Original Message Follows----
From: Finmagik <finmagik@yahoo.com>
To: ffml@anifics.com
Subject: [FFML] Pyrrhic Victory [Fanfic] [Ranma]
Date: Thu, 30 Aug 2001 09:49:50 -0700 (PDT)

Pyrrhic victory.

by Finmagik

Warnings: dark, angst, POV, Deathfic.
Rating: R
Discalimer: The chracters in this are creations of
Rumkio Takahashi.
"I burn, burn like a wicker cabinet chalk white and oh
so pale."-Evesix.




It was funny in a sick way, Doctor. All that time
spent practicing magic and how it almost always
failed. It was one of the two
important things in my life one was Akane Tendo and
the other was magic. Spells never seemed to work and
Akane, hardly
noticed me.

Until that day..... I don't want to think about it. I
closed my eyes. That horrible, wonderful day. Finally
had the power... but
the cost of it.... and the look on their faces. I
wasn't a geek anymore to them I was a disgusting
monster.

I shut down after that, it was good when they decided
to put me away. In this lovely institution.  How was
tonight a beautiful evening?  I wish I  could know
the weather, because I'm trapped inside, insiede this
cell. The scientists probing and
poking wondering if I could do it again. If they could
harness the power some how.

Akane's face that day.... her face.... I'd do
anything.. to back in time...... to stop it. I'd be
happy if thing had just

continued as they were, me living out my existence in
her shadows, I was unhappy still its better then what

happened that day.

I don't want to remember.... its only to help the
scientist. You and I both know Doctor they'll never
let me out of here  even if this
therapy session does help me recover. Look around you,
all the security, they consider me to dangerous to let
loose on
the streets. Me, imagine that! If they knew the things
that went on in Nerima. They'd lock up half the
population of the
district. And don't ask me again about that day.

Please don't ask me. I'm sick of the tests I don't
like being a lab rat and you already know what
happened from you're files..

PLEASE DON'T ASK ME AGAIN!

Oh look I set the little machines beeping faster heh
heh heh.... how amusing. Oh I'm sorry, did I scare you
Doctor? Don't
worry as you can plainly see I'm strapped down, nice
and snug.

Hmmmm

Akane...............Tendo...............I wanted to
visit... there.... but I can't...... I can't.......My
beautiful, strong, Akane...... how I
love you.....I'll always love you....

Then here is the deal, Doctor you do a favour for me
and I'll tell you. No matter what happens.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~

My latest scheme had to work, a few fixed photographs.
Saotome would of course react the way he always did,
being
defensive and name calling. Then she'd leave him for
good and I'd meet her and comfort her, then Akane
would me mine! My
sweet Akane. It was morning in school, the day before
last I had let the photos slip out to a place were she
could find them. I
was in one of those rare golden moods, and so nervous
with anticipation. For good measure I also did a
little a voodoo. We
were in the school it was morning.

I never saw her coming through the crowd, my back was
turned. I was focusing on the voodoo doll. There was a
tap on my
back. There was Akane standing before me. An angry
statement on her face.

"H-h-hello Akane...." I stammered out.

"YOU CREEP," She yelled, she threw the photographs, in
flurry they fell to my feet. "DID YOU HONESTLY THINK
YOU'D GET AWAY WITH THIS??!!!"

"I-I-I..." I was trying to put the words together but
was so amazed Akane was speaking to me, I couldn't. A
crowd was
gathered around now.

"YOU PUT ME THROUGH HELL FOR THREE HOURS, YOU PUT MY
FAMILY THROUGH HELL!" She paused.
"Thank god, for Nabiki she was able to tell that the
photos had been tampered with."

"Ummmm I..." I had never seen such rage, so up close
and personal. I was cowering and listening, I saw the
crowd Hiroshi
and Daisuke were smirking, the girls were whispering,
Ranma had a look of anger on his face and Kuno stared
at me with a
hard glance. I tried to approach her, but she punched
me in the stomach, I crumpled before her feet.

"I never would believe you would sink so LOW. Others
maybe, but not you. You've always been such a polite,

kind, person. How could you," I looked up at her face,
she was still angry, but she looked so angelic." And
why the HELL
did you want to hurt me?"

"A-A-akane... I love you. I wanted us to be
together......" I had finally admitted to her.

"LOVE?!! That was SELFFISH, DUMB and HURTFUL!"

"Don't you... love me?" I hoped, I could hear the
whispers and gasps. I looked up at her face she

blushed a bit caught off guard, then she scowled
deeper.

"HIKARU GOSUNKUGI,," She paused, she knew my name...
my first name. "I NEVER LOVED YOU! I NEVER EVEN
LIKED YOU IN THAT WAY! I JUST TOOK PITY ON YOU!" I
began crying then. I knew she was telling the truth."
I
THOUGHT you were a nice a guy DESPTIE the strangeness,
but NICE.... Somehow you misunderstood, I'm sorry."

I couldn't compose myself. I couldn't think what to
say. Everyone was whispering... and she was above
me... the words were
like bullets.. "Akane... I love you...." I gasped out.
She was walking away.

"I'M SORRY I EVER SAID HELLO TO YOU!" She yelled over
her shoulder.

"Akane....akane....." I called weakly, I crawled after
her. Calling her name, to stunted to say anything

else. I felt something, tingling in my head. I found
my strength and rose to my feet.

"Akane.... Akane...." I called her name she didn't
turn around. The tingling seemed to spread growing
more intense.
Everytime I said her name it grew louder. Then
suddenly, I wasn't sad. I was angry. The tingling now
felt like a pressure
building up. HOW DARE SHE! GO INTO THE ARMS OF SATOME!
SAOTOME WHO, DEGRADED HER! She
would rather have him, THEN ME! I loved her! I Love
her! And she'd rather have someone like THAT!

Now, I could feel something like a bolt of electricity
in my mind, infusing every cell. "AKANE!" I shouted in
a voice that
sounded far to strong to be my own.

There was this explosion inside. I saw a white ripple
of energy, expanding from my body outwards. Everyone

saw it As it hit the crowd of students. They fell to
their knees, clutching their heads and waling in pain.


Akane didn't turn around she didn't see it, didn't
hear it. She was almost to doors of Furinkan
Highschool. She turned around,
the ripple hit her. Her eyes went wide, her mouth
opened. Blood poured from her mouth, her ears. Her
body convulsed. Her
face became blank fixed in horror and she fell to the
ground. Motionless.

The minutes after that passed so quickly I didn't know
what happened. My mind is blank. Next I was walking
through the
crowd around Akane, they parted for me, backing away
in strange fear and shock. I got to the center. Akane
lay on the
ground in a pool of blood. Kuno was sobbing, by her
side and Ranma was almost on top of her. He has
shaking her
desperately. "Come on, Akane wake up! Wake up Akane!"
He said. "Come on, you dumb macho chick snap out of
it! This
isn't the time for this. Akane, wake up! WAKE UP!
We'll get you to Doctor Tofu... and he'll fix you
up... and we'll go home
and Kasumi will make us some tea.... everything will
be fine... WAKE UP AKANE! I promise I'll never
complain about your
cooking again, If you just snap out of it!" He shook
her limp body, several times, her eyes never
fluttered, she limp as a rag
doll. Daisuke touched his shoulder and whispered

in his ear. Ranma shoved him away. I saw a tear in
Ranma's eye. "Ak-ane.... I...love you..." His voice
was soft now.

Ranma looked up me. I expected he would be angry, but
instead he just looked at me, with wide astonished
eyes. Like the
others. I stared at the gallery of faces, all eyes on
me. I had finally impressed them, me the weakling, the
nerd, had shown so
much power. Power that couldn't be taught by a dojo.
Now I could do magic. I saw Ranma's tear stained face,
I had beaten
him, The ferocious Ranma Saotome. I had finally
brought him to his knees and made him as weaker then I
was. I began to
laugh, despite the horror all around I felt so
powerful, so great. Then I looked down at Akane's
body. But it was to late to stop
laughing, the horror, the disgust, the joy and madness
seemed to blend all around. My knees became weak, they
couldn't
support my weight, I couldn't support my weight. I
fell, toppling beside Akane. I was still laughing. I
love her so much.......
The crowd was motionless, they just watched stunned.

I ran a finger over her cheek, cold as clay. I was
still giggling, softly I saw Akane's face, it was so
passive, all her fire and
passion were gone. This was just her shell I had done
this. My laugher turned to crying. I was so weak now..
was I near
death's door?

Softly, gently I pressed my lips to hers. Then
everything went black.
~~~~~~~~~~~~

There you have it Doctor. As you know, the records
show Akane Tendo died of a massive brain haemorrhage.
The
government probably has done a good job covering it
up, I don't know how though, with so many witnesses.
Now, I gave
you the story, don't ask me again. I showed them.....
even the government... how powerful I am. But at the
cost of Akane's
life.

Funny those machine stopped bleeping.... Oh, what
their not working? How? They exploded. I must have
done that, an
accident. So sorry, please tell the white labcoats,
they I didn't mean to ruin their precious
experiments... heh... heh.... heh

Now about the favour, here it is. Please put a some
flowers on Akane's grave. Nice ones, the best money
can buy. Don't
worry you can write it off as a government expense.
Also drop by the Tendo dojo see how their doing and
don't tell them
about this. They don't hate me there and besides, they
would never believe you.

I haven't talked or moved since that day ten years
ago. To all appearances I'm a catatonic. You think I'm
talking to you but I
haven't said a word.

~Fin/Owari~

[Note: Any C&C appreciated, I'd really like to know
what you think and yes I write  a lot of Stuff about
Gos-chan. what can I say I'm a fangirl. And my
computer messed up in the Last fic I psoted here
replcing "" with ?]

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