Brian Randall wrote:

DB Sommer wrote:

Since people have been prodding me lately, I shall once again prove this
isn't dead yet. Mind you, this is just the teaser for the next chapter:

    Let's see if I can't be productive today...

Seemed plenty productive as far as I'm concerned.

http://dbsommer.rcbooks.org

And also Angcobra is now storing all of my fics, at
http://s5.sexshare.com/~angcobra/dbsommer.html

    That's right, folks! DB Sommer Lite(TM)! Coming soon to a store near
you! ;)

You laugh. But I've been bumped from webpages that have crashed before. It
never pays to have too many people gullible... errr, I mean kind enough to
store my stuff.

Also forgot to mention that Bloodblade and Slashley also have Avenging
stored on their webpages too. Have to throw those in the revision. :)

Mopping the sweat from her brow with a hand-embroidered silk

handkerchief,

Kodachi Kunou gave a satisfied smirk at her handiwork. Finally, it was
finished. It might have taken the better part of the last two days, but

the

results were what she had desired. The Iron Rose Mark II armor could now

fit

into the attach� case she had especially designed for it. True, the case

was

a bit large, actually it was three times the size of a normal attach�

case,

but it was necessary. The armor was just too bulky to fit in something
smaller, even with it having been redesigned to be collapsible, as it was
now.

    I trust all the repetition of 'hand' is intentional? :p

Only saw it twice in the opening of the paragraph. Didn't think it was
excessive myself. Overused 'attache case' though. Will want to cut back on
that.

    Kodachi: Just you wait, you red-haired hussy, Shiiko will be mine!
No, wait... wrong series.

Heh. For all you know, Shiiko could be in this somewhere, lurking under a
stone, just waiting for her moment to cry and wail. :)

small army of investigators to discover that person or company's

identity.

    Second line, repetition of 'recent'.

Got it.

nearly impossible. Without them, it would go smoothlessly and save the
person trying to buy the company billions of yen, at least. That was more
than enough motive for any ruthless person or corporation to have the

only

potential stumbling block eliminated, or at least try to eliminate them.

    Smoothlessly? You mean seamlessly? Flawlessly? I'm not sure that
flows...

Should have been 'smoothly' actually. Don't know how I missed that one.

He had fallen victim to some sort of brainwashing as well. And no leads

had

turned up on that clue to date either.

    Last sentence, commage? Not sure...

Not sure either. Will look it over again.

attach� case. She was going to show it off to the world. Once people

became

used to her always walking around with it like it was surgically attached

to

her, no one would be suspicious that she and the Iron Rose were the same.

It

was a great plan.

    Except the entire, "taking off all her clothes and donning the armor
in public" thing, but she thought she could get used to that pretty
quickly...

No no. That sort of stuff is being saved for 'Ranma: Sextacular," that I
might get around to doing one of these years. :P

She closed the lid on the case. A mental note was made to make the helmet

a

little more collapsible, since she had to force the top shut. But now it
looked fine, except the large size of the case. She grabbed the handle

and

pulled it off the table it was resting on...

    Have you ever read 'Your Half'?

Nope.

...And promptly screamed in pain as the case landed squarely on her foot,
the weight of the attach� being far too much for her to carry around.

    Thought so.

You knew with that build up it had to not go the way she envisioned.

the current version had be damned. In the meantime, she was going to have

to

modify the attach� case again. Maybe some wheels added to the bottom and

a

pull cord...

    Or better yet, someone to carry it around for her...

Her version of 'Happy' Hogan, eh?

    Repetition of armor? Additional defences, protection, shielding, etc?

Will see about cutting it back then. Might have overdone it.

    "God, I wish he would wear pants."

Save for the fact his legs were stilts.

    Dang. Close, though. :p

Heh. True.

"The Stilt Man!"

    That sounds... usefull. I guess.

Not one of the villains that has made the transtion to the modern era
easily. Though he did get to fight quite a few people in the early days.
Black Goliath. Thor. Spider Man. Captain America. Even took on the entire
Champions team at one time.

And no matter how bad it gets, at least he'll never be as big weenie as
perhaps the biggest loser Marvel ever produced, 'The Steeplejack' Both I and
II. Nothing like having a deadly 'rivet gun' to strike terror into the
hearts of people:P

legs to enable me to get really tall and... hold on! I'm getting tired of
shouting!" The Stilt Man's hydraulic legs, which looked pretty much like

two

plain, thick columns with nothing in the way of feet, retracted downward

so

that he was only fifteen feet high instead of the previous ninety.

    Tripping could be bad, yes.

True, though he didn't do it too often.

While his arms were out of sight behind his back, Daredevil flicked his
wrist and a crowbar fell from out of his voluminous robes and into his
hands. He made it appear he was listening with rapt attention while he

used

his body to shield the crowbar from view. He softly played it along the
ground until it caught in the opening he had spotted with his radar

sense.

"So, what you're telling me is, your sole superpower is the ability to

look

stupid on a pair of adjustable stilts."

    He must have very long arms.

Who Stilty, or DD?

drawn to them even while she's in the middle of fighting them. That's

what I

want, but what do I get? Weenie race car drivers. Men in frog costumes

with

springs in their feet that have the ability to *gasp* jump. Overweight

guys

that have bad hair and can glide. An owl is not an intimidating creature

to

anything but a mouse, godamnit!"

    Comma before the *gasp* ?

Okay.

    Also, that ten tons of hydrualic force only works if Stilt Boy
weighs more than ten tons. That pressure's going to send him _up_, not
his target _down_. Maybe he's not as much of a hydraulic genius as he
thinks. :p

Heh. One of the things they never really paid attention to in those early
days of Marvel. Physics. :)

equivalent of a five foot gopher hole on a man not wearing stilts. His
downward motion was only arrested by his body hitting the pavement at the
edge of the hole. Or, to be more specific, his crotch hitting the

pavement

at the edge of the hole.

    Man. Sucks to be him.

Yeah. Even aside from the whole 'I run around in armored stilts' thing.

"Needed... more... armor... there," Stilt Man squeaked out as he remained
exactly where he was, tears streaming from his eyes.

    Needed or need? Wait.

    No, don't answer that. Ow. >_<

Heh.

Daredevil walked up to his opponent, twirling something that looked like

it

was from a UFO Catcher machine. "Give up, or do I show you the terrors of

my

new weapon, the 'testicular claw'?"

    Is 'UFO Catcher' a name brand? I always thought it was just the type
of machine...

You're probably right. Will not capitalize 'Catcher' though UFO still needs
to be.

As I said, this was just the teaser. Expect the real meat of the chapter

to

start after these two bits. Will post the rest once I get the time to

finish

it. Ideally that will be sometime later in the week, but we shall see.

    Yes. Yes we will, won't we? :p

At least a week from the looks of things now. I hate my job.

BTW: The sad things is, Daredevil's early foes did tend to be
'unforgettables' like Leap Frog, Stilt Man, and the infamous original
'Hooters' of crime the Owl and his flunkies. And don't ask me about the
'Masked Matador' with his ability to use a red cape to make charging

people

miss him. ^_^

    I only remember one or two Daredevil comics, actually, and the one I
remember most clearly involved something about vietnam... which tells
you how clearly I remember it. -_-

Heh. Well, hopefully the anime conncetion to this will keep you interested.
I explain most of the villains powers as they are introduced, in true comic
book fashion, so that should make things a lot easier.

Thanks a lot for the C+C. It's appreciated.

D.B. Sommer


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