Glad you liked it. Hmm, the MKR/R5 crossover... We'll see :)

Thanks for your comments!

My replies to the comments preceeded by **
----- Original Message -----
From: "Alex Gray" <hitomi@ndirect.co.uk>
To: "Rakhal Stormwarden" <ffml@rakhal.com>
Cc: <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Tuesday, August 28, 2001 1:47 AM
Subject: [FFML] Re: [Ranma] Special Training

Well, this is something I thought I would never, ever see -- Rakhal

writing

a fic!

Bravely done, Sir Knight! I hope this is the first of many more to

come! ^_^

(Like that one you were thinking about with the MKR/R5 crossover

perhaps...)

In general, an amusing piece which I quite like.

Anyway, please see some more comments below ^_^

Cheers

Alex

It had been a fine week at the seaside and a happy party made

their way

home to the Tendo Dojo at the end of it. Nabiki was in the lead,

reaching

the front door first, Kasumi was close behind and, bringing up the

rear,

Soun and Genma came, struggling with the bags.

-- I think this might sound better.

...was close behind, and bringing up the rear, struggling with the

bags,

came
Soun and Genma.

** I think you're right with this. I'll change...

"That is if Ranma is still living," Nabiki commented. "A week of

Akane's

cooking, and the only service that Ranma may need will be the

mortician's!"

...will be that of a mortician's!

** Will leave this one alone I think, the consensus appears to
indicate that it's OK

"So, how many holes do we need to repair then?" Nabiki commented,

looking

around the house. Surprisingly there weren't that many new holes,

far

Surprisingly,

"I don't know where that baka has got to. For the last couple of

days he

seems to be avoiding me! How am I supposed to improve my cooking

if he

...he seems to have been avoiding me! (past tense ^_^)

** Yup, will fix

the Ucchan's a couple of times, and the Nekohanten once, but he

doesn't

I think you can drop the 'the' in 'the Ucchan's' - it sounds a

bit... odd.

"What's wrong, Ranma? What have you been up to?!" said Akane. "It

can't

be anything good, or you wouldn't be scared!" If anything Ranma

looked

more scared.

But if anything, Ranma looked even more scared.

** I'll add the missing comma here I think

Nabiki eventually broke the silence. "Saotome-'jisan, I think

Akane's

cooking is as effective as a pit full of starving cats. Wouldn't

you

agree?"

Giggle!

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