Even as dire as the situation had been early on, she had needed the favors

the double-edged ability imbued within her.

I'm not sure if this should be 'had needed' or 'had not needed'.

It was such a waste. Now Link was dead, and what did she have to show for

it?

Since this is from Jaddo's POV, it should be Pink not Link.

As good as she was normally, her reflexes and strength seemed at least

three times faster than before

As strength isn't described by 'faster', perhaps you should use 'better'
instead?

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