I dont think the problem is getting just one gun, there are so many ways to
get a gun and all that, I mean with preparition you can get just about
anything.

But one thing seems to bug me slightly couse of them laws is that there seem
to be two guns one is thrown about and lands on the doctors desk, the other
he blows his brains out with

but as always a great story

----- Original Message -----
From: "allyn yonge" <ayonge@yahoo.com>
To: "C. Jones" <guilty@furinkan.net>; <ffml@anifics.com>
Sent: Thursday, August 23, 2001 5:17 AM
Subject: [FFML] Re: [Ranma] newRanma Chapter 11

As always a masterful piece of story telling. A great
read.

One _tiny_ nit to pick.
There are more guns in Japan than most people realize,
but they are primarily a "knife" culture. Much more
likely to use a blade . . .knife, sword, cross-bow
than a gun, and more likely to have a long-gun than a
pistol. NOT impossible, but for what you are doing...
seems to be a rather middle-class man in a fit of
anger I'd go with a blade. Just change sound of shot
to a scream and the rest can stay as is.

HOWEVER, it's not impossible for the man to have a
pistol. OTOH, a knife or sword is even more likely to
do the kind of damage you're describing, especially if
the Bad Guy does (as usually happens) multiple
strikes.

As I said a wonderful read and this is a minor point.
I didn't find it at all dark.

If you wanted DARK, you would have used the recent
case in Japan of a 14 year old boy cutting off an 11
year old friends head and playing with it  before
leaving it on the street with a note attached,
taunting the police. Now THAT'S dark.
http://www.theage.com.au/special/asiaonline/japan/rs050797.htm




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