Sorry for the delay on the reply.

And to prove some people are reading the Refuge posts

Thankfully some are ^_^

Best Match

Any one that lights on the first strike always gets my vote. :)

*Groan*

A Ranma 1/2 fanfic
by Ginrai

Ah, as good as a 'Prepare for mental trauma' sign there. :)

Heh, I see you're prepared ^_^

Upstairs in the room of the youngest daughter, though, was a completely
different story.

Three girls... Correction, three very annoyed girls were

girl, were (I think)

Yup, will change.

 locked inside,

their legs having been chained to prevent movement as well as their
wrists being chained

Two 'chained's close together. 'bound' will work for the second.

Will change.

 behind their backs, which were then connected in

such a way so that their backs were facing each other in a triangular
formation.

Aww. And that's such a nice set up for a lemon too. :(

Heh

Note to self: Take at least an hour break from reviewing any fics

following

C+Cing one he wrote. Too much carry over. ^_^

Hehehe

If another were inside, they would have accused the girls of being
perverted in some nature.

And they would have been right, though that is not what we are focusing on
at the moment.

Not this time ^_^

"Well, Shampoo," Ukyou said in a monotonous tone, "that's some mess
your potion has gotten us into."

'this is another fine mess' would sound better to me.

Yup.

'this is another fine mess you've gotten us into.'

Will then sound more like Laurel and Hardy (in other words, funny ^_^)

"Just _how_ were you able to create such a potion?" Akane asked,
annoyed at being locked in her own room.

Hmm. Not the third most people would have suspected, I'd wager.

Course not ^_^

Most would have thought Kodachi ^_^

  She was curious as to where

Shampoo got such a concoction and why the Amazon never used it before.

"Shampoo get formula from Amazon Book of Contrived Potions.

Hehehehe. I've always wanted to see someone say that. Only too

appropriate.

Just sorry I didn't come up with it first.

Heh, that name's been in my head for some time.

Definitely wanted to use it one time or another considering how many
times I've seen that cliche used ^_^

If Ukyou had access to her spatula, she would have grabbed it and
flattened the Amazon.  As it was, she couldn't even see her rival so
instead had to visualize the girl being in front of her, which caused
the chef to scowl right away.  "And just _why_ did you even consider
using One Minute Eternal Love?" she growled, her attempt at hiding her
anger having not been successful.  "Why not use something safer like...
Passion Spice?"

Shampoo: No be silly. That trick never work.

Akane: Sure it does!  I get Ranma in the end.  Isn't that all that
matters?

"Ukyou's right," Akane added, "At least it certainly wouldn't have
resulted in this debacle."

drop 'certainly' makes things too bulky.

Dropped

Hearing what the others had to say, Shampoo laughed out loud, amused at
their 'simpler' plan.  "Spatula Girl stupider than Shampoo thought if
she think _that_ would work.  And Pervert Girl probably want Shampoo to
use Passion Spice."

Akane: Throw in a kunoichi and it's a deal.

Sometimes even I'm astounded at the lengths of self-plugging I'll stoop

to.

Akane: Add a naked, pink-haired catgirl in the furo and now we're
talking.

Self-plugging?  Where?

This statement caused Akane's anger to flare up as she tried to turn
around and tell Shampoo what she thought of that.  Which resulted

That resulted (sounds better to me)

Will change

 in

the short-haired girl pulling on the chains around her wrist,
tightening the chains around the wrists of the other two girls, which
then began to pinch, eliciting cries of pain and annoyance.

Someone got their merit badge in knots, I see.

Made sure that nothing could go wrong ^_^

"Akane!" Ukyou screamed in pain, "Damn it, you knew what pulling on the
chains would do!"  And in retaliation, the brown-haired chef pulled on
her own chains, instantly causing the other two to grimace in pain.

I can see where this is going.

It ain't ever easy ^_^

"Shampoo no like getting hurt twice!" the Amazon shouted, gritting her
teeth as she pulled.  Hard.

Ah yes, the downward spiral of self-inflicted pain. :)

Heh

Instantly Ukyou's smug look changed into that of one in

'into one of ' (will be just fine.

"As Shampoo was saying, it would have worked if Spatula Girl didn't hit
Ranma into Shampoo's chest.  Shampoo no mind having Airen in there but

there, but (I think)

Will change

Akane could only shudder as she remembered what they saw after their
fight was stopped.  Well, it had to stop after hearing _those_ noises
as they could only watch with mouth and eyes agape.

Not sure I want to know now.

Most of the readers don't ^_^

Worse for her, she had to experience this _every_ day afterwards.
Those loud squeals, which were a result of Ranma's different 'styles.'
And furthermore, the fact that it almost always took place right above
her room!

On the roof? Maybe it should be 'below her room' since the Saotomes sleep
there, I would imagine.

Hmm... will see.

This went on until finally the raven-haired Tendou daughter couldn't
take it anymore and tried to put an end to this 'forbidden love.'

But Mousse would have none of it, and tied Akane up before she could
interfere.

Heh

Unfortunately, this went about as well as Shampoo's plan and as a
result, ended with all three girls locked in her room until the events
downstairs conclude.

concluded.

Changed

Right away both girls felt a dark aura emitting from Akane.  Ukyou
wondered if it was such a great idea to have asked her that question.

"They found a loophole in the agreement to unite the schools," Akane
muttered.  "That is all I'm going to say."

Probably for the best.

Thought so too ^_^

Seeing that no one else was talking, Ukyou decided to say something to
get their attention.  "We can't just sit around here and let what's
going on downstairs to continue,

drop 'to'

The plan itself was so simple that the girls wondered why they didn't
think of it before.

"Okay, now hop forward."

"No, Akane, wrong way!"

"Shampoo, the other way!"

They soon found out why.

So I see. :)

It wouldn't have worked ^_^

But it was far too late

Indeed.

It was over the moment Ukyou came up with that idea ^_^

as the joint efforts of Akane going one way,

Shampoo another and Ukyou one completely different from the other two
caused them all fall

all to fall

Changed

 down, Akane face-first while the other two fell on

their sides, right on top of the short-haired girl.

They found out rather fast that it's quite hard to do anything when in
said position.

At least, anything that wouldn't get 'lemon' in the subject line

Didn't want the fic to have any redeeming qualities ^_^

Nodoka started to wipe the tears from hears.

'her eyes' (At least I hope that was what that was supposed to be)

Yeah, my mistake ^_^

  Such a beautiful moment.

And what a nice-looking girl, too.  Certainly better than how it was
before, though she still had to do something about that tongue sticking
out now and then.

Uh oh. Got a bad feeling about this.

Only got that now? ^_^

It was nice that her son finally made a choice.  Now

she could start thinking of all those grandchildren her son would
beget.  Such a nice thought, indeed.

Veritible 'litters' of them, I'd wager.

Hehehe

Soun and Genma were already making plans for the future of their
schools of martial arts.  Finally the schools were united and all
thanks to an act of kindness by Kasumi when she was a child.  Who knew
that saving animals could reap such fortune later on in life?  Good
fortune was certainly on their side.

Not sure if I'd call it good fortune, but oh well. :)

A marriage that went off without any damage should be considered 'good
fortune' ^_^

And to the side of Ranma was his lucky bride.  It was certainly
different seeing all these people from this perspective.  Ever since
that kind old lady splashed her with that strange water.  And with the
amount of food she now got.

RUn on there.

One of the many grammar mistakes that have to be fixed.

 Instinctively eyeing the table with the

cake, her tongue automatically stuck out as she began to pant a bit.
Then remembering what her master said, she stopped and brought back her
tongue inside.  Even though he did act weird every now and then,
something about 'doggy style,' which she might one day understand, it
was all worth it to get the food.  Life for Bess Saotome was definitely
looking up.

I see Gary has been rubbing off on you. :)

Sort of ^_^

--------------------------------------------

This is the result of being too bored

And being a real sicko.

That too ^_^

It flowed well, though there were quite a few typos and grammar errors. A

Hopefully will fix all of them in the revision.  That and add a bit to
the second scene.

cute fic, though.

Thanks.  See, it wasn't _that_ bad ^_^;

Thanks a lot for the C&C (two for one fic ^_^)!

Ginrai
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