I can't really give you many details, as I didn't notice many grammar errors
that weren't deliberate. Overall this was well written and enjoyable. You
fit in the past history to back up what had happened to Nabiki and the rest
when it was needed and not to much otherwise. The only thing that was really
jarring for me was Ranma's speech, it was just a bit too rough in most places
and seemed rather out of place with the rest of his character. Other than
that though, it was a nice story, well laid out and executed.