A sound concept but I have a few nitpicks. As Allyn often says "Take what you 
choose and discard the rest." Basically, this is all my opinion.

-Tatiana's motivations for turning Demona human are sound, but may I suggest 
that this might read better if she literally turned Demona into Nodaka? That 
is, her last thoughts as Demona would be right before she was born. That way, 
when Ranma's genetic heritage comes into play on his 21st birthday, so would 
her memories of her past life. This way, the point of the story, which is, as 
I understand it, to teach Demona to care about humans, would become more 
effective and you could have some great character building as Demona/Nodaka 
tries to come to grips with the fact that she does love humans, despite the 
lifetime she has spent hating them.

-That said, I'm having some trouble with how easily she beats Happosai up on 
a repeated basis. While the level of punishment she inflicts might be 
plausible if she were still a gargoyle, she's only human and as you stated 
out, has no memory of her gargoyle life. That said, it is possible to win 
against the little pervert. I would suggest she hits him with something and 
then drop-kicks him out the door.

-Last, but not least, grammer. Commas are your friend and your nightmare.

Example: You wrote:
"He looks like a good warrior Tita," Demona stated. "Maybe I should test him 
out."

You neglected the comma before Tita. When one character is adressing another 
by name or title, there should always, and I mean always be a comma before 
the name or title.

Secondly, your dialouge is a bit stiff. Not that this is a bad thing, but to 
be bluntly honest, it ruins the fic. Synonyms are your ally here. As an 
example, let's look at the above sentance again. 

"He looks like a good warrior Tita," Demona stated. "Maybe I should test him 
out."

I suggest something like this: "He appears to be capable, Tita," Demona 
mused. "Very well, I will spar with him."

Anyways, those are my thoughts and I wish you happy writing.



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