that were taking place in this lab.  The problem had been that the
Matrix security for was pretty tight to the point that at no time did

                            ^^
You might want to remove the word 'for' here, or add 'it' or something
like that.

the central computers for the lab ever connect in real-time to the
Matrix itself.  The solution was for their decker to create an automated
smartframe which could sneak into system and grab the data and have it

                                                             ^
sneak into the system, grab the data, and have it

Reikai surged to her left at the cast mage.  Several options ran through

casting mage

her head, but one seemed perfect.

"Batusai Tenketsu!!"

Bakusai

Mai Ling saw her coming and was desperately trying to finish her spell.
She heard Reikai summon her chi and suddenly she felt sharp pains in her

I think, "She felt Reikai" would for better.

gesturing to the dwarf who nodded respectfully to him.  "As that most of
you don't know each other, Derek Johansson is a formal Lone Star officer

former Lone Star

Inside the van, the set her down on the floor and they had time to notice

they set

but in no way infirm.  Her people had had a long history of fighting off
infirmary, and she excelled in that way.  Now, she stood there looking

infirmity


Well, an interesting fic thus far, I would like to see more. One thing that
did make it hard going though, I always have a hard time reading a fic
where Ranma has been killed.


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Druid
druid@bigplanet.com

Where there is love, there is life.

"You don't need a reason to help people."
   Zidane, Final Fantasy IX



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