At 09:53 AM 6/25/01 -0400, Miller, Bert wrote:

Nice job.  Maybe now I'll be inspired to finish "Akane: Choose your own
Adventure".

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Those "choose your own..." stories are hard to put
together, aren't they?

Not too many 'good' endings to balance out the dark ones, though.
Though perhaps you have covered all the good endings which make
any sense for BGC (giving the ADP the jammers).

I wasn't really concerned about balancing the number of happy endings with
the number of darker ones. First, for purely personal reasons, that would
be a pain in the backside to do - it was hard enough to get all the
branchings and links and loops straight. But mainly because BGC tends to
the darkside, and having a bunch of happy endings didn't makes sense for me.

Part 27

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     High atop the most controversial corporate headquarters building 
in the world, Chairman Quincy of Genom placed the telephone handset 
back into its cradle.  He had thought that this late, or early, 
depending on one's point of view, she'd have been home to take his 
call, especially since there were no reports of her group having made 
any appearances in the past week.  But she hadn't answered, and he 
wasn't about to leave a message.  Maybe one day she'd find out about 
the opportunity she'd missed, but somehow he doubted she would.

There aren't any paths where Sylia actually takes the call to
be appointed chair of Genom.  I think it'd be nice to supply
one.

Part 36

     "Yes," Sylia said curtly.
     Priss was surprised.  "If it's so bad, why isn't Leon 
there?" she 
wondered.
     "That's not our business.  Linna, Priss, get clear and return to 
base," Sylia ordered.  "Nene and I will meet you there.  We'll do a 
quick charge on the suits and re-arm them, and then go back out."

And how about a path here where 'Leon' is actually a disguised
boomer, who succeeds in killing their client since they're off-
guard?  Then their business dries up since they failed a highly-
paid job.

Thanks for the suggestions. Obviously there are uncountable ways to have
done this, but I don't think any story could cover every possiblity without
things getting way out of hand.

But thank you for taking the time to read my fic, and more for taking the
time to send your comments :)



Jeanne Hedge
http://www.jhedge.com

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