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Well, you did ask for it...
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On Fri, 19 Jan 2001 09:40:05 EST Ranmapat01@aol.com writes:
Saffron�^�^�s defeat had left time for things to calm down before
the
inevitable return to Nerima. The hope of a cure at Jusenkyo was
lost to all
the cursed parties. On the other hand, love had been admitted and
accepted.
Have you actually read the end of the manga? Absolutely nothing
was addmitted. Akane stopped Ranma before he said anything, and he later
denied that he was ever going to say it.
The only real change is Ryoga offically giving up on Akane.
Nabiki was making arrangements for their return, talking to
Ranma by
phone in a
small town near the outskirts of the Biankala range.�^�^�... So you
have a few
days to get to the boat. I thought you might want to make the most
of your
time and get cured.�^�^�
�^�^�Weren�^�^�t you listening, Nabiki? Jusenkyo was destroyed!�^�^�
�^�^�I�^�^�m not thinking about Jusenkyo, Ranma. Go to the
Musk.�^�^�
Why bother with Nabiki? Ranma isn't a genius, but he is smart
enough to think of things like this from time to time.
�^�^�The Musk?! Are you out of your mind!?�^�^� One hand held the
phone glued
to his
ear while the other gesticulated wildly. As Nabiki outlined her
idea, the
free arm settled and a smile grew on his face. �^�^�Genius, Nabiki,
as always...
See you soon.�^�^�
The others were gathered around him, his father, Ryoga, Mousse,
Shampoo,
and... Akane... They all looked expectantly at Ranma. �^�^�All
right, here�^�^�s
what we�^�^�re gonna do...�^�^�
This seems too easy.
Getting into the fortress of the Musk was easier than anyone had
anticipated.
Little real attention was paid to women and so the three girls just
walked
right in with the ones that had been working the small farms outside
the
gates.
LITTLE ATTENTION? ARE YOU NUTS? This is the MUSK, a male only
tribe! Most of whom have never even seen a woman before. Lime and Mint's
reactions in Nerima, multiplied by a few hundred times would be a better
description. The only reason Herb wasn't acting like his two lackeys, is
because his curse made him dislike women in general.
After that it was tricky. Ranma led the way, with occasional
input from
Shampoo. During the trip, he never let go of Akane�^�^�s hand.
Predictably, it
was kept in the throne room. Herb was by himself, apparently going
over
matters of state.
Actually, the idea of a Musk village was invalidated in the
Manga. Cologne tells that Lime, Mint, and Herb are basically the last
reminants of the Musk. There is also no indication that they were ever at
war with the Amazons. Something a lot of fanfic writers like to do for
some reason.
There would never be a better time.
Herb looked up in surprise as the doors to his Throne room were
knocked
off their hinges. The last thing he saw before the darkness took
him was the
fling redhead, and her sandal covered foot.
I think you meant flying. Unless a fight broke out amoung the
Nerima crew, and Ranma was thrown into Herb.
Anyway, why not just ask Herb? He respects Ranma, and would
probably listen to him. Especially if he carried a cure for Jusenkyo
under his belt. Even more so if he knew about the battle with Saffron.
Getting out was a bit of a challenge, but that was only because
they
didn�^�^�t want to be seen.
Not for Ranma. Umisenken.
The small group was gathered around their campfire, two days
later. They
had
made good time getting away from the Musk and tomorrow morning they
would
leave on the boat to Japan. A pot of water was suspended over the
fire until
it steamed and bubbled a bit.
Why wait two days? The Ranma crew is impatient if nothing else.
They'd stop at the first place they could build a fire and try to use the
ladle. Regardless of anyone chasing them.
Ranma held the Chuisuiton in his hands. Amazing how something
so ordinary
looking could cause so much trouble. You wouldn�^�^�t think to look
at it that
it was
anything other than a ladle.
He looked around himself, at his friends and his family. �^�^�Let
me go
first, if this
doesn�^�^�t work at least I�^�^�ll still be able to talk.�^�^� Ryoga
looked like he
might object at first but then calmed down.
Ranma�^�^�s hand found Akane�^�^�s, his eyes found hers. Briefly,
their lips
found each
others. �^�^�I love you,�^�^� he told her for the second time, his
voice an intense
whisper.
Well, you're streching a bit here. Ranma and Akane didn't become
a cute cuddly couple after Jusendo. They pretty much went back to the way
things were. Ranma and Akane didn't stop arguing and fighting, but they
weren't really serious about it.
Tears filled Akane�^�^�s eyes as he dipped the ladle and poured
the contents
over his head. �^�^�OUCH!�^�^� came his strong voice. No change. Then
he dipped
his own cup into the bucket of cold water, pouring it over his head.
�^�^�Brr!�^�^�
came his strong voice. No change.
�^�^�It worked! HA!�^�^� Ranma cartwheeled around the campsite.
He flipped
into the
air, landing near his love. �^�^�Akane, I...�^�^�
�^�^�Ahem!�^�^� came a voice that chilled his blood.
Turning, Ranma saw the Lord of the Musk, standing just inside
the
firelight. They had all been so intent on the fire and the ladle
that they
hadn�^�^�t noticed his approach.
�^�^�All I want is my property, Ranma. I have no wish to fight
the man who
destroyed Saffron.�^�^� The warriors of the Musk became visible.
Lots of them,
the small band noted. �^�^�But I will fight it I must.�^�^�
�^�^�Herb!�^�^� Ranma called excitedly. He was before the young
man in an
instant.
�^�^�We came up with a cure for Jusenkyo! Hot water and the
Chuisuiton!�^�^�
�^�^�A... cure?�^�^� He looked somewhere between impressed and
amused. �^�^�Of
course. How foolish of me.�^�^� He looked past Ranma at his party.
�^�^�If I
allow your... cure, will you return to me the Chuisuiton?�^�^�
�^�^�Sure, got no use for it after that. I was gonna mail it back
to you
tomorrow
anyway.�^�^�
A hint of a smile passed over Herbs face. He quickly spoke up,
�^�^�I can
always
count on you to try to do the right thing, can�^�^�t I, Ranma?�^�^�
Well. I find it a bit hard to swallow that no one in the Musk
ever thought of that...[Thinks back to Lime and Mint...] Okay, never
mind. It's perfectly plausable. Herb seems to be in character here
though.
Genma and Ryoga took advantage of the Chuisuiton�^�^�s power, but
Shampoo and
Mousse declined. �^�^�Cat body is Shampoo punishment from village.
No can take
away with honor.�^�^�
�^�^�I will not leave you to suffer alone, Shampoo!�^�^� Mousse
cried with
tears in his
eyes as he hugged one of the Musk warriors.
Nope, not buying any. Mousse was just as upset as everyone else
when Ranma blew up that spring in the second movie. Shampoo's cure never
really came into play though, so it is possible she might keep hers.
Twenty years passed in Nerima. Akane and Ranma were married and
lived
lives
full of danger and adventure. Ryoga settled down with Akari and was
seen
less and less as the years passed by.
By everyone, including Akari, who had no idea where he had
settled. I figure he got real lost, and just decided to stay where ever
he was.
Once the marriage was settled, Cologne and the Amazons stopped
their
chases and for many years remained a part the lives of the Nerima
crew.
Eventually, they decided that their place was home, in China and
they
departed.
Ukyo stayed the whole time. She held a bitterness in her that
gradually
turned to hate. Ten years after Saffron and the unification of the
Saotome
and Tendo clans, she attacked Akane. The battle lasted for nearly a
day,
ending in a draw as neither woman could conclusively beat the
other.
For Ukyo, it was the therapeutic. She settled her differences
and
renewed her
friendship with Ranma and Akane.
I can buy that. Seems okay. This seems more like a run down of
events rather than a fic. You would do better to actually write a story
involving all of this. This would make a good outline. Maybe mentioning
events in conversations that you don't want to write out.
Oh, and you don't need 'the' before therapeutic.
Nabiki never married and eventually went to college, getting a
business
degree.
She turned her attentions back towards her family after that,
bringing new
moneymaking ideas to Nerima.
Kasumi eventually followed after Tofu, the two found each other
and lived
on the
far side of Japan from the family. There frequent visits, along
with their
son, Soun,
brought both joy and pain into Ranma and Akane�^�^�s lives.
You mean found Tofu? He disappeared early on in the Manga.
Though they had tried, Ranma and Akane seemed doomed not to have
children.
Genma and Nodoka, Soun as well, had pressured them for a time, but
eventually
they stopped when the disappointment and pain to the couple became
too much.
Of course there was excitement enough to turn them away from
brooding.
Together, they went on to fight old gods; new gods; old enemies,
such as
Taro, Happosai- who seemed to have more energy and stamina the older
he got
and all new enemies. Akane seemed a magnet for lost princes and
lonely
warlords.
Twenty years passed.
And there was great rejoicing...
The bedroom was hot. He was sweating under the thick blankets.
Breathing had become raspy. His lungs were thick and heavy. Still
he had
that cocky smile on his pale face. �^�^�Don�^�^�t worry, Akane, I�^�^�ll
be up and
about in no time. A little thing like pnu-�^�^� he cut himself off
with a series
of lung scraping coughs that dislodged a small amount of phlegm.
�^�^�This
won�^�^�t keep me down.�^�^� What little strength he had seemed to be
leaking out
of him rapidly.
In refference to the story where Happosai gets sick and gives his
fever and chills to Ranma... They keep trading them back and fourth, and
the symptoms are very extreme. When Ranma has a fever, the whole room
turns into a sauna, an when he gets the chills, his body covers in ice.
It would take something worse than that to take down Ranma.
Akane was at his side as the last rattles of breath left his
weakened
body. She sat there, by his side, crying for a time.
A short time later, the ambulance arrived. It seemed kind of
ironic, to
Nabiki that
they sent an ambulance to pick up the body. The medical teams were
there to
save lives, but here and now they were too late and they knew it.
The men
solemnly followed Tofu up to the body.
She couldn�^�^�t make her mind wrap around the idea that it was
Ranma. That
he
was.... Ranma always got out of everything. Since they were
children,
nothing could touch him in a lasting way. Not even Jusenkyo.
I bet he got out of this one too...
Noone had thought anything of it at first, just a cough. It
progressed
rapidly into
something worse. He was only sick a couple of days. Did people die
from
pneumonia in just a couple of days?
Yup. It can really happen too, but it's very rare, and wouldn't
happen to someone as fit as Ranma. Especially in a country with advanced
medicine, like Japan, to a family who could probably afford to pay for
the treatment. [It might be tough for them, but they could do it.]
He had been tired from the fight. He was then single-handedly
able to
destroy the tidal wave from within, using the Hiryou Shouten Ha. He
admitted
that he�^�^�d swallowed some water but seemed okay.
Think of a better way to kill Ranma kun.
Akane was crying into Kasumi�^�^�s shoulder, still unable to speak
after
watching her husband fade so rapidly. Soun had gone to get the
Saotomes and
bring them here. Ukyo looked stricken. Her face was a blank mask.
Tofu and the EMT�^�^�s came back down the stairs. Tofu had a
smile plastered
on his face that only his wife could have seen through. The EMT�^�^�s
weren�^�^�t
smiling. �^�^�You do realize we could press charges. Misuse of the
Emergency
Response System is a crime.�^�^�
�^�^�I do apologize again. We can�^�^�t begin to tell you how sorry
the family
is,�^�^� Tofu
was saying. The couple and their son had been on their way back
when they
heard about the attack by the �^�^�Son of a Hundred Spirits.�^�^� They
had only
arrived a few minutes after Ranma�^�^�s passing. Getting into and out
of Nerima
was difficult right now.
Gee, I was right.
BTW... Nerima is a suburb. Getting in and out of there would not
be difficult at any time of day. How much traffic do you see in an
average episode of Ranma 1/2?
�^�^�Its only because he lives here that I�^�^�m willing to let this
slide.�^�^�
�^�^�I understand, sir.�^�^� Tofu continued placating them even as
he ushered
them out
the door.
As soon as he returned to the family, Akane asked, �^�^�Why
didn�^�^�t they take
Ran-
why didn�^�^�t they take him?�^�^�
Tofu ran his hand over his mouth, as though massaging it for a
moment.
�^�^�Come
with me, all of you.�^�^� He turned without another word and walked
up the
stairs to the
master bedroom.
Lying on the bed, breathing softly, was a sixteen year old red
headed
girl.
�^�^�Oh, my!�^�^�
Let me hazard a guess here. Ranma-kun died, and only the male
body kicked it. The female form was used as a spare, and now he's stuck
that way?
Jusenkyo might be able to fix that. Since the Chisusiston was
used only on the male body. It would be like having a reversed curse.
Techincally making Ranma and crew immortal, as long as they were able to
use the Chisusiston.
Just something that kinda came to me as I was waking up this
morning. Please
feel free to cut me down to size.
Not to bad. Fix those quotes though. I got a headache reading
around them.
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