"Miller, Bert" wrote:
Heh! For a short, quick spamfic, this is very good.
Thanks. I've done C&C at work before, but this is the first time I've actually
written a fic on company time. Let's hope no one from management is subbed to
this list. :)
All his life, that stupid panda had been making all his
choices for him, planning his entire life without ever
asking or even caring how *he* felt. Now Ranma would marry
her, and they'd open up an okonomiyaki shop and have three
children, and....
Ukyou, in the handy capsule version. Well-phrased.
Gotta give credit to Doug here. This was mostly inspired by part of his C&C last
night on another fic.
Oh, what a happy life they would have together, once they
moved back to the Amazon village and she taught
him his proper role as a male.
OTOH, this seems to me to reflect more fanfic convention on
the horrors of marriage to Shampoo rather than Takahashi
canon. For one thing, there is little to no indication in
the manga that either Shampoo or Cologne actually _wants_
to move back home. (Granted, for a quick fic I wouldn't
have re-thought everything through from scratch either.)
True, this is kinda fanfic cliche, but as you say, it's just a short. My goal
with these bits was to show each fiancee in a kind of "say one thing, do
something different" mode. I'll think about whether I can come up with something
more appropriate for Shamps.
senses and now saw things clearly, and without even the need
for drug therapy.
...after all, Ranma SO adores her laughter...
Hey, doesn't everybody? I try to practice Kodachi-laughing whenever I'm on a
roller coaster or something like that.
He could go marry the dog next door, for all she cared.
Heh. Advertising your own work?
Just wait... I'm gonna write the only Ranma/Bess lemon that's actually
plausible.
Akane strikes me as slightly OOC here; although inarticulate
in these circumstances, she usually seems to me to be aware
of her own feelings. Takahashi would draw her as highly
anticipatory and very nervous, for instance.
I'll have to think about this one. Akane does have problems accepting her own
feelings, though you're right that it's not nearly as bad as it typically is in
fanfics.
...and poor Ranma can't even stick with THIS decision,
supposedly "final"...
AKANE: Hear that, Ranma? You can't even stick with peanut butter.
RANMA: Hey, maybe I could if I didn't wash my hands for a while....
Many thanks for the comments!
Gary