*DANGER*    *CUT-THROAT C&C AHEAD*   *DANGER*











I gather that you were apparently trying to 'surprise' us with 

Ranma's choice, but I must admit that your efforts were transparent 

from the very beginning of the story. Some justification for Ranma's 

choice during his internal reflection would have been nice at the 

least. As it stands, the kindest thing I can say about your ending 

was that it was both weak and trite. You were probably better served 

by spending the majority of your hour thinking about how to best 

arrive at your ending rather than simply taking an overused Ranma 

fanfic idea and running with it to such a mediochre conclusion.



Oh yeah, the word is spelled 'reveal'



J. Austin Wilde

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