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The FFML Synopses List RETRO-REVIEW! (HYPERSPACE!)
====================== > - - *
For the week of: November 10, 2000
Reviewer on Duty: Glazius "Aster-oid" Falconar
Synopses Reviewed: 26 (8 for weeks before, 3 for the weekend)
- 26. Dear lord.
- Let me remind you folks _before_ this starts this time around.
- What I say here is a product of about a dozen years of a nigh-
- irreproducible combination of reading materials and academic
- studies. Therefore, any attitudes I express are not likely to be
- mirrored, in whole or in significant part, by the populace at large.
- Readers, if a blurb sparks your interest but I pan the story, read it
- anyway. If I like the story, don't assume you'll like it when _you_
- read it, but read it anyway. And give the author a note if you're so
- inclined.
- Authors, whatever comments you see here are _my_ comments. I may
- occasionally presume to speak for the list on grounds of formatting or
- grammar, but anything else - including and especially story plot and
- the progression thereof, and story characters and the interactions
- thereof - is my opinion and mine only. Any suggestions I make are for
- the sole and admittedly selfish purpose of tweaking your story so it
- sits better in my brain. If you think my brain is weird, or any one of
- a number of more colorful terms which I will not reprint here, as small
- children may very well be reading this, then there is no need to change
- the story. Likewise, if you are satisfied with the aspects of your
- story that I address, there is no need to change them either. Don't be
- surprised if I find something to quibble about that your prereaders
- miss, or if other people find areas for improvement in a story I could
- suggest nothing for. I am not them, nor they I, for most definitions of
- "they" and "I".
- I may question your interpretation of canon. I may question canon
- unknowingly, as I am not nearly as familiar with many series as I would
- like to be. I may question the expression of certain themes; this does
- not mean they are not worthy of being expressed, merely that the
- expression leaves something for me to desire. I will talk about your
- story, but I will not and, indeed, cannot talk about you. Unless your
- story is a perfect replication of you in all regards, in which case,
- you have my congratulations for doing what no human has managed to date.
- Post no spam, close cover before bootup, no flaming in the theater,
- praise does not enable wearer to fly, text does not walk and talk,
- contains vegetable salty, do not operate mailreader in bathtub, provides
- 495% of the USRDA for vitamin BS, half-price admission for sprites under
- 6 milliseconds when accompanied by a paying Guardian, and a free no-
- prize to anyone who spots all the references in this paragraph,
- including this one.
* * * * *
[Anime Mega-Crossover]
- - - - -
Title: Republic of Desire
Episode: Part six: THE END! Or MAYBE! IF YOU'RE LUCKY!
Genre: Humour, Autobiography
Author: Subi
Email: subi@gameart.com
Homepage: http://www.gameart.com/4ca
Archived at http://www.gameart.com/4ca/rod/rodff06.txt
Date Sent to FFML: November 7, 2000
Archive Number: 15674
Size: 46 KB
Title Summary:
I was eight, living with the parents in a village that had been trans-
ported brick-by-brick from its original position in middle England to
just outside Tokyo. My father worked for the Japanese government, fool-
ing visiting foreigners about the true nature of the product of the vast
silicon chip mines. One day a girl called Tuzi turned up and claimed to
be my sister. Somehow, everyone believed her, even my parents, despite
the markings on her face and the rabbit ears. But _I_ knew, oh yes.
Episode Summary:
A bizarre chain of circumstances involving and orange and a loaf of
bread had led to me challenging the only other English boy at the
school, called Lyn something-or-other to a game of cricket. At stake
was the avoidance of a fate worse than death as punishment for the
mashing the contents of Mr. Kenshiro's underpants with a rocket shot.
Added to that was my growing realization that _something_ was not quite
as it should be, but every time I sat down to have a serious think about
it, I... What was I saying? Oh yes, the cricket match...
- I haven't played cricket.
- Thus, the first two-thirds are not nearly as fun as they could be.
- One of the risks you take with specialized humor, I imagine.
- I find myself completely unable to, for lack of a better word, care.
- So he's writing himself into existence. Aside from the temporal
- Gordian knot that creates, big whoop.
- I think if Tuzi didn't know so much about the writing reality, it'd
- work a bit better. The Fourth Wall needs to at least notionally exist -
- the image of someone growing up shaped by the image of what he already
- is - or wishes to be - certainly has potential.
- If, for instance, the author wanted to become a social butterfly and
- dropped his past self into a decidedly tangled situation, to better
- gain experience while sorting it out - only, of course, he's got no
- idea how to go about that.
* * * * *
[Digimon / Megaman]
- - - - -
Title: Digital Souls Part 5
Series: Digimon, Megaman X
Genre: Action
Author: Wanderer D
Email: wandererd@hotmail.com
Homepage: http://wandererd.cdreams.com
Date Sent to FFML: November 12, 2000
Archive Number: 15756
Size: 30 KB
Summary:
Matt is back to the Digiworld, and has met with his brother and friends,
but, is he ready to tell them the truth about himself?
- Here's a tip. When you put REVIEW ME! in the subject line (as was done
- with prior parts) that really doesn't make me want to review it.
- Especially when the same story shows up bearing the tag multiple times.
- Anyway.
- I see you've decided to ignore X4. Many people feel that Capcom
- shouldn't have tried to nail the story to the wall the way they did.
- (To wit, one possible interpretation is that Zero was a counterpart to
- X prepared by Dr. Wily, possibly _containing_ the Sigma virus.)
- ...or not. X is a little cheesemonger now, isn't he? It'd help
- enormously if you took the time to add a few scenes that actually _show_
- the denizens of the digiworld behaving around X in the way you describe,
- as opposed to just telling us about things.
- And my take on the special attacks in the X series is that they're just
- kludges - temporary memory engrams or salvaged power units that can
- put out attack power, but will burn out rather quickly - within
- perhaps a month or two. If this varies from canon, please correct me.
- All in all, I really don't understand what you hope to gain from this.
- It seems as though you're telling the story just to tell the story...
- unless things are going to change significantly from Digimon-01 plot
- somewhere down the line, why bring X into it at all?
* * * * *
[Monster Rancher]
- - - - -
Title: Falling
Genre: Serious
Author: Platinum Dragon
Email: Platinum_Dragon@usinternet.com
Homepage: http://dragonsanime.com, http://pixieshrine.dragonsanime.com,
http://www.usinternet.com/users/platinum_dragon
Archived at http://pixieshrine.dragonsanime.com/fics/falling.txt,
http://www.usinternet.com/users/platinum_dragon/mr/falling.txt
Date Sent to FFML: October 21, 2000
Archive Number: 15292
Size: 5 KB
Summary:
A follow-up to "Moonlight Thoughts", these are Pixie's thoughts as she
is falling from Moo's castle.
- Well, of course, says part of my brain. This is a medieval fantasy
- setting. Physics hasn't been invented yet.
- But unless Genki had hella swoop room, wouldn't she at least feel the
- impact-like quality the change in velocity vectors would impart?
- Then again, this is another case of not seeing the original, but I
- severely doubt anybody's got the time to think so much with so many
- pauses during any sort of plummet, aside from the occasional eternal
- and silent drift into the void of space.
- If you want, you could probably expand the time frame a bit, so she's
- got the running commentary on the action as it's happening, as opposed
- to... well.
- It's not that I doubt the emotions, it's just that I don't think they
- can be compressed into such an interval.
* * * * *
[Neon Genesis Evangelion]
- - - - -
Title: The Success of Two Salarymen
Genre: Comedy
Author: Lara Bartram
Email: lara@emunix.emich.edu
Homepage: http://www.thekeep.org/~lara/
Title Summary:
The true origin of Neon Genesis Evangelion in a world without angels or
giant robots.
- - -
Episode: part a & b
Episode Summary:
Pregnancy, hellspawn, and an opportunistic reporter mark the beginning
of the quest to finish Studio MicroNax's Next Big Thing.
All is forgiven, but that won't open up a pair of handcuffs.
- Lara, don't ever change.
- I don't know how we'd get anyone else who can pull this off.
- It reads like a sitcom, honestly it does, and it's quite funny when it's
- trying to be and rather funny even when it isn't trying.
* * * * *
[Neon Genesis Evangelion / SailorMoon]
- - - - -
Title: You Want to What? In the Name of the What?
Genre: Lime, Comedy
Author: Jusenkyo Guide
Email: jusenkyoguide@mailcity.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/~jusenkyoguide
Date Sent to FFML: November 10, 2000
Archive Number: 15726
Size: 24 KB
Summary:
Someone has been stealing the Greatest Treasures of Tokyo-3... All the
Sailor Moon stuff in the city. It is up to our band of intrepid heroes
to bravely march forth to find the foul villain and make him or her
surrender the goods. But the band was off so it's up to Shinji and Asuka
instead.
Rated R for lots of latex and a puffing penguin and may cause computer
damage if read while drinking a soda.
- Stream-of-consciousness comedy. Intriguing.
- That means, roughly, that it seems as though you wrote down whatever
- seemed funny at the time. Some things come over well, like Maya's
- press conference. Others, like the setup of said conference, don't.
- Mostly, it's because a lot of the phrasing is awkward. Especially when
- something depends for its effect _on_ a clean and fast read, bad
- phrasing can seriously impact the work.
* * * * *
[Ranma 1/2]
- - - - -
Title: RANMA 1/2 -- The Contract
Genre: Drama, Fantasy
Author: Nidoking
Email: Matthew.P.Katinas@Rose-Hulman.Edu
Homepage: www.rose-hulman.edu/~katinamp
Archived at www.rose-hulman.edu/~katinamp/TheContract.html
Title Summary:
Marriage contracts signed in blood provoke a series of strange events
and unlikely engagements in Nerima, overseen by the strange cloaked
merchant who seems to have plans of his own for the contracted couples.
- - -
Episodes: 1-7
Episode Summary:
When Shampoo learns that she is contracted to marry Razor, she
understandably becomes rather upset. That is nothing, however, compared
to her reaction to the magical condition imposed on her relations with
other men...
It seems that everyone is trying to find a way to break Shampoo's
engagement to Razor, but the solution has fallen into the hands of an
unknowing outside party.
The plan to use Ukyo's contract to break Shampoo's encounters a slight
snag that may leave Ukyo regretting her decision.
Now that Ukyo has signed Ranma's contract, tensions are mounting among
the Ranma characters - tensions that may prevent any resolution to the
situation at hand.
Akane secures a contract, only to have it fall into Kuno's hands! Ryoga
fights to reclaim it, but which one will end up with the contract, and
what will become of Akane's future marital status?
The plan to identify Akane's new fiance hits a small snag - Ryoga's got
a secret that Akane can't be allowed to find out about! Meanwhile,
Shampoo comes to terms with her own engagement, in a slightly different
way...
Shampoo, torn by her newfound feelings for Razor, tries to recall their
childhood together. Meanwhile, Kodachi's contract has been signed by
yet another unwilling suitor.
- I wouldn't worry much. Confucion say: Man who see world through rose-
- colored glasses look at pink elephants.
- Whatever's happening, it's actively rewiring brains. Except Ranma's,
- which wasn't quite wired right in the first place. There are some
- good original-flavor moments - Ranma still feels a little uneven in
- places, like when he's talking about relationships, but it's good to
- know his motivations are decent.
- Wonder exactly what the catch is going to be.
- - - - -
Title: Ranma: Xero Part 9: The Unwanted Residents
Genre: Sci-fi/Adventure
Author: Carrot Glace
Email: Carroglace@juno.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/misatira/
Date Sent to FFML: November 6, 2000
Archive Number: 15645
Size: 22 KB
Summary:
The Amazons arrive in Japan.
- I'll say it again - what makes the Nerima crew needed here, besides
- your use of name and likeness? The original personalities and their
- roles here in the story are far too separable. I can't find much to
- quibble about as far as the _plot_ goes, but I don't see any reason
- for the characters that are in it to _be_ in it.
- I especially wonder why anybody's still letting Ryoga drive.
- - - - -
Title: Saotome's Choice
Episode: Chapter Three - Ancient Chinese Secret
Genre: Serious
Author: JP Buckner
Email: ajaff@poky.srv.net (Jeff Smith)
Homepage: http://onewest.net/~ajaff/manff.htm
Archived at http://onewest.net/~ajaff/sc3.txt
Date Sent to FFML: November 5, 2000
- Wow. Two days' lag in the _early_ direction.
- I sort my archive by date now. It's at least somewhat easier...
Archive Number: 15610
Size: 63 KB
Title Summary:
Saotome Ranma desires one thing more than anything else.
- I'm telling you, it's a pastrami on rye. With mustard.
- Look, I understand the attraction in being vague and mysterious, but
- this almost never works unless what you're referring to isn't serious
- at all.
To what lengths is he willing to go to get this? How will this affect
everyone around him?
Episode Summary:
The first day away from the Tendo's brings some confusion, and other
feelings, for our lead character. Meanwhile, Akane tries to deal with
Ranma's departure, and Nabiki goes to talk to the Amazons.
- Firstly, pick through and watch for shifted tenses. I hit one in the
- dream sequence and it derailed my train of thought.
- Don't show both perspectives in the Nodoka-Ranko scene. You start out
- in Nodoka's viewpoint, and that works well, so eliminate most of
- Ranko's thoughts after that. It doesn't really work to consistently
- remind the reader that there's no good reason why any of this should
- be happening.
- Do schools have a summer break in Japan? I seem to remember that what
- break there is is much shorter than what we'd get over here. And again
- with the incongruent knowledge of English.
- ...yes. Definitely keep us in the dark about what Ranko's thinking.
- "She knew her mother was right"... about what? "Just like before,
- only better"... that doesn't say anything tangible at all. And it
- doesn't help that you _point out_ how intangible it is.
- Who or what took out Akane's spine? She's just automatically agreeing
- with everything Kasumi says. Especially given what's happened, I can't
- see that happening, unless she's still grossly unhinged...
- It's only an omen when something unexpectedly falls _and_ breaks.
- And the Nekohanten uses clay pots? If you don't mean the cooking sort
- then you should say so, because you've got references to the kitchen
- in the paragraph with it. And if Cologne's the only character in the
- scene, it goes without saying that she's thinking if there aren't any
- quote marks. You don't need to tell us.
- Come to think of it, you need to find a more convenient way to indicate
- thoughts. Or at least stay away from reflexive pronouns - of _course_
- thoughts are self-contained, unless there's another twist you're
- planning in re telepathy.
- Just... well. Running commentary on the mental states of multiple
- characters in one scene is a bad thing, especially when it breaks up
- the flow of the dialogue. Pick _one_ character and put assorted
- important thoughts and _unexpected_ reactions in - you don't need to
- tell us that Sayuri's concerned, for example, if said reaction comes
- through _in the next line of dialogue she speaks_.
- I'm fairly sure that prejudice against Shampoo is more fanon than canon,
- though Japanese attitudes toward outsiders are well-documented. Don't
- assume your readers will assume what you've assumed, and at least throw
- us a thread to grab onto - if anything, Shampoo commands a lot more
- respect than one would imagine a waitress could.
- Adrian Tymes will now explain why or why not. BUT NOT BOTH.
- ...I'm stopping. I can't _go_ more than halfway through this. I don't
- _want_ to have my hand held, I don't _want_ to be told even the
- smallest things, and I don't _want_ to have to read through three
- paragraphs of something I could sum up in a sentence with no loss of
- content. There's too much text here that doesn't really _say_ anything,
- or circles a point without ever really getting to it. Read your scenes,
- ask yourself what you want to happen, restrict viewpoints, and pare down
- the internal monologue. Express thoughts through action and attitude
- rather than simple transcription - show, don't tell.
- Okay, so I'm not stopping. The commute home revitalized me.
- Hmm. You're taking pages from "The Nature of the Curse", only peeling
- most of the logic away.
- Wow. Akane must really be skilled. She mastered a technique using
- unfamiliar premises at lethal strength when it took Ranma several
- days of focused study to replicate even a _part_ of it.
- I guess I've read so much that nothing seems new anymore, and all I see
- in this story is plot points from other stories mishmashed together,
- with inconsistent tone and character depth, and verbose and
- frustrating prose.
- - - - -
Title: Two Halves of the Whole
Genre: Serious
Author: Light Hawk
Email: LightHawk@nc.rr.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/LightHawk19/Index.html
Archived at http://www.geocities.com/LightHawk19/TWOTW.html
Title Summary:
A new character, Jay Scott, enters the fray in Nerima. Now Ranma and
company must not only deal with their own problems but now they have to
deal with Jay's as well.
- - -
Episode: Chapters 1-4
Episode Summary:
Ranma goes on a training trip into the mountains of Japan. While there,
he meets a swordsman, Jay, of high skill. The two get to talking and
eventually Ranma challenges him to a sparring contest the next day.
Ranma wins but only after disarming Jay.
Just your average day at school for Ranma and Akane. Miss Hinako tries
to drain a sleeping Ranma, Kuno doing his morning routine, etc. We also
find Jay looking around Nerima looking for the Tendo dojo.
Ranma comes home, wet and female, as usual after a fight. After coming
out of the bath he discovers Jay and Akane will be training together
some days. Akane doesn't mind and Ranma thinks it's a good idea. The
three get into conversation during which Jay discovers Ranma's curse
when Akane throws him out into the rain.
Training day! Akane rushes home, knowing today is sparring day with her
father. Instead, she finds out that Jay came over to return the
borrowed umbrella and ended up starting his first training session with
her father. Over the course of the training Akane and Jay work with
each other on various problems using several drills. At the end, each
have a brief sparring match with Soun. When Soun throws Jay into a
bucket we find out Jay has a Jusenkyo curse, Shuanshontsuniichuan.
- One, keep tense consistent. It slips in the opening to part two.
- Two, who's Sharon Miller?
- Three, if this is post-Jusendo, Ranma's got the Umisenken in his
- repertoire, so he can totally _erase_ his presence.
- Four, things are happening rather arbitrarily come chapter 2. There's
- no underlying reason to latch onto, and not enough time's spent
- talking about reactions, as opposed to actions.
- That's the main area for improvement, really - you say things happen,
- but that's it. They just happen. Sometimes not even _that_ - don't just
- skip over five minutes of conversation, you can _use_ that. There's not
- much else here _but_ plot, and your new character seems like just a
- skillset.
* * * * *
[Ranma 1/2 / SailorMoon]
- - - - -
Title: Ranma Papa!
Genre: Crossover/Alternative
Author: Chas Chas
Email: chaspark@hotmail.com
Archived at http://members.nbci.com/phu_lam
Title Summary:
Ranma became a father?! Another one of Genma's mistakes comes back to
haunt Ranma... but is it really so bad?
- - -
Episode: Chapters 1 & 2
Episode Summary:
It was one of those days in the Tendo Dojo... until Doctor Tofu dropped
by with shocking news that could change everyone's lives...
Ranma and co. are trying to cope with the new addition in the family...
but the rest of Nerima couldn't stay patient with the news...
- Gyeh. The dialogue is just... very, very rough. I can grasp the intent,
- but the execution needs to be smoothed a bit.
- The premise is interesting enough, and the actions are believable, but
- you really need to go over this with a grammar checker. It's difficult
- for me to look past something like that.
- The Ranma/Makoto scenes are pretty good too. It's a nice bit to taper
- out on.
- - - - -
Title: Souls of Fire
Episode: #11: Ascension
Genre: Continuation/Crossover
Author: Razorclaw X
Email: spiceoflife@hotmail.com
Homepage: http://www.crosswinds.net/~slythe/sm/souls.html
Date Sent to FFML: November 9, 2000
Archive Number: 15710
Size: 80 KB
Title Summary:
The Fenril Knights stand at the mercy of the Sailor Senshi, defeated in
their war, but the Fenril Triumvirate planned well for this
eventuality.... With the unfeeling Mekani poised to attack at any day
now, the Sailor Senshi may have to turn to their former enemies to
survive....
Episode Summary:
Ravaged and weakened by the Fenril war the Sailor Senshi play a game of
catch-up as they discover why their human enemy appeared bent on
destroying the Earth. Old hatreds die hard, however, as some of the
remaining Fenril Knights refuse to side with their sworn foes.
- "The hating needs to end," Mars knew.
- Okay, that's without a doubt the most bizarre verb I've ever seen
- following quotes. You use it in several places. Does it refer to a
- thought, something spoken aloud, something being re-affirmed on both
- levels, what?
- It's the little things that get up in your brain and force the
- narrative flow apart.
- And other things do it too. It seems like, for the first half of the
- story, the characters are playing the roles they need to play for the
- story to continue. And then in the second half of the story, they act
- at least somewhat as they normally would - while still playing said
- roles. The dissonance this sets up in my mind is rather grating, to
- say the least.
* * * * *
[Ranma 1/2 / Variable Geo]
- - - - -
Title: Variable Half or "We have to do WHAT?!?"
Episode: Chapter 3
Genre: Crossover/Fusion, Lime
Author: Christopher Olsen
Email: gamers@prodigy.net
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/Tokyo/Dojo/1449/fanfics.html
Date Sent to FFML: November 8, 2000
Archive Number: 15683
Size: 30 KB
Title Summary:
Ranma and Akane enter the VG tournament.
Episode Summary:
Our heroes discover the true nature of VG, and the price of
participating.
- It helps to refer to the part number in the title. Just a hint.
- And... hmm. Smooth exposition, if not seamless. One must wonder what
- it will take to put Akane off this.
- Ranma's got entirely too much pride to back down and it's not really
- _his_ body anyway, but Akane... is just being stubborn, I think.
- You could play this straight, or you could play it for consequences.
- Either or.
* * * * *
[SailorMoon]
- - - - -
Title: Shades of Gray
Episode: Chapter 4: The Search Begins
Genre: Action, Drama
Author: Aaron Nowack
Email: anowack@yahoo.com
Homepage: http://www.geocities.com/anowack/
Date Sent to FFML: November 9, 2000
Archive Number: 15715
Size: 33 KB
Title Summary:
Pharaoh 90 has been defeated, and now the Senshi, both Inner and Outer,
can relax. At least for a few months, right? Wrong. Within days of
the Death Busters' defeat, an old enemy returns, and a new force enters
the battle. Is this force friend or foe to the Senshi? Or even both?
Join everyone's favorite sailor-suited heroines as they struggle to find
out.
Episode Summary:
The Dark Kingdom steps up its attacks as Hermes puts in an appearance.
The fighting between the Senshi and the Champions continues, and the
Champions actively begin to seek out their unawakened brothers.
- So have you ever gone into politics? The backstabbing in the yoma court
- is worthy of a polisci veteran of several years.
- One of the big problems I have with something like this is that the
- canon universe is more or less a closed system unto itself. Trying to
- smuggle a sidelight in under the blanket of conspiracy doesn't wash -
- we're expected to believe that the canon happened just as we saw it,
- complete with flashbacks to a past that never happened, and this was
- going on all the while.
- If you're rewriting history, rewrite it all.
* * * * *
[SailorMoon / The Terminator]
- - - - -
Title: Eclipse of the Moon 2: Purification Day
Episode: Chapter 6
Genre: Satire/Action/Comedy
Author: Miashara
Email: s2mlmill@titan.vcu.edu
Homepage: http://www.execulink.com/~stryker/
Date Sent to FFML: November 9, 2000
Archive Number: 15688
Size: 18 KB
Title Summary:
The Senshi vs the Terminator.
Episode Summary:
Everybody runs around like dyslexic chickens on no sleep and vivarin.
Author does not responsibility for anyone's craving to play bassoon
after reading this chapter.
- You do not know the truth of which you speak.
- "I figured... a tall girl like me could at least be good at cooking..."
- If my memory of that S episode is off, then many apologies.
- I'll assume the over-the-top language is so chosen deliberately, to
- prove some point. Even if that is the case, I can't say I see the point.
* * * * *
[Original Series]
- - - - -
Title: Baka Yaro Story 01 Chapters 1 and 2
Genre: Martial Arts Gag/Satire
Author: Ryonator and Miyazawa Kenji
Email: ryonator@yahoo.com
Homepage: http://geocities.com/fringe_of_insanity/
Archived at http://geocities.com/fringe_of_insanity/bakayaro.html
Date Sent to FFML: November 9, 2000
Archive Number: 15707
Size: 68 KB
Summary:
A satire on martial arts manga. The story follows Hideoshi Shin on his
quest to train in a strong dojo, beat the villains, and get the girl.
Trouble is, he's got horrible luck and plenty of people who either want
to marry him, or want him dead. This is funny as hell. Soon to come in
manga form.
- Well. It'd work better as a manga, I'll say that much. A lot of the
- story depends on the quick visual cuts and action sequences that are
- much easier to depict in pictures than in words. The characters are
- interesting enough, but I feel like I'm missing about half the story,
- probably because I'm not picturing things the way you are.
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- That's all for this week, folks.
- I think the plan from here on in is that I catch up to the present day
- while Elsa takes care of the more recent works. Here's hoping we can
- manage to stay on top of this together.
- --G. Falconar