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So far this is off to a decent start. My main coplaint is the grammer
errors. Slayer is *always* capitalised. Plus, periods are put at the end of
some sentences where commas should be.
The plot seems interesting enough, but in the end I was left with the
feeling that this was just going to be a odd way of getting Tenchi and Ryoko
together. Plus, I really don't see many paralles between the relationships
between Tenchi and Ryoko and Buffy and Angel. Lastly, some note where is
takes place continuity wise would be helpful. I'm guessing it's Buffy season
3 after the Prom but before the Mayor was killed and Tenchi Universe after
the deafet of Kagato. But I could be wrong. I'd also like to add that the
desvription seems lacking in some parts.
On the plus side the Scooby Gang banter is done rather well and Aeka and
Ryoko didn't come off as bitchy.
Skyrocket