From: "Hans Holm" <hansholm@bredband.net>
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	"Ryoga P Hibiki" <carrotglace@juno.com>
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Subject: [FFML] SV: Re: [FIC][NEW!]R.5] Amazing Spiderman Issue Ten
Date: Thu, 16 Nov 2000 15:09:47 +0100
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I have to agree with this, even though I haven't read or even cared

about Spiderman for years (since before Carnage, in fact).



Hans Holm



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        Secondly, I'd like to point out several major problems with =

the

new stuff. I realize that this is an alterniverse and all, and =

involves

Ranma. You're changing things a bit and that's cool. Just don't do too

much. I've pointed out some of the major things that don't sit well =

with

me, it seems you've rushed the Venom story out for some reason.

Because he thinks all the older, classic Spider-foes aren't as cool?

Where's Beetle, Scorpion, Sandman, Electro, Vulture, Mysterio et al.?

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        Four: Kuno was in no way involved with Mousse kidnapping =

Akane.

There's no real reason for him to know anythijng about it, much less =

have

memories of it.

Not to mention that the first time Mousse showed up (which was at =

Furinkan,=20

complete with after-school challenge, so Kuno would probably know), he

didn't kidnap Akane. That was the second time, which may not be public=20

knowledge (i.e. known by Kuno).

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        I suggest a complete rewrite of the past three chapters. Why =

you

might ask?

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        Because Ryoga is the perfect host for the Venom Symbiote. He's

gone often enought that he could fill the roll easily, he can just =

show

up when he's needed and vanish just as easily and nobody would =

suspect.

His character is much more in tune with the roll. [Please don't make =

him

Kraven!]

Wouldn't Shinnosuke be better for that?

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        I can see that you're probably planning on making Carnage

Kodachi. That's cool too, but Kuno would be better as she's mostly a

running gag more than anything else. She's crazy and maybe psycotic

enough to do it though. She's also a little smarter than Tatewaki, but

that could work against the Symbiote more than anything else.

Green Goblin! Green Goblin! Green Goblin!

I seem to recall someone called Carrot Glace who argued that in =

Batman-Ranma

fusions Kodachi should be The Joker, and she fits even better as Green =

Goblin.

(rich, skilled in chemistry etc.)

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        Keep it up, it's really good despite the rushed appearance of =

the

last three chapters. I hope to see more of this soon!

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        Ja!=20

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        Carrot Glace

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