Subject: [FFML] Re: SV: [fanfic][Ranma/GL] Bedlam Fire chapter 1
From: allyn yonge
Date: 11/22/2000, 10:05 AM
To: Hans Holm , ffml@fanfic.com





Hi,

Thanks for writing.



-- Hans Holm <hansholm@bredband.net> wrote:

Just a few nitpicks to spoil everbody's fun.

I liked this, but I can't show my appreciation

any other way.



@@You could send money. ^_^



But C&Cing is nice too.





Hans Holm



<SNIP>



"The Green Lantern", copyright ALL-AMERICAN COMICS

 # 16 (July 1940)   

I thought DC comics was/is the actual copyright

holder. But then

again, the legal (or any other) aspects of Green

Lantern is not my

area of expertise.



@@I'm not a lawyer. However the first

appearance of Green Lantern was

the 1940 issue of ALL-AMERICAN COMICS.

ALL-AMERICAN COMICS (AA) was

 published by Jack  Liebowitz and M.C. Gaines 

when the  publishers of DC Comics refused to

add another title to their lineup. AA was independent

 of DC, but the distribution system was the same

 and they promoted each other's titles. 





               

(Note: Green Lantern #16  provided the inspiration

for this

story. However only the colour green remains.)





     Zhang, the necromancer, turned the stone in

his hands. 

It wasn't really stone, but then Zhang wasn't

really his name.

Not the one he'd been born with decades earlier,

thousands of

miles away in the black forests of Germanica. 

Before the

My books say Germania (as well as Britannia, Gallia,

Hispania etc.).

I don't speak Latin, but I think Germanica is the

wrong inflection.

(cp. Encyclopedia Britannica)



@@Oooops. 

You are absolutely correct. ^_^

A disadvantage of working w/o pre-readers.







     Satisfied that her flanks were secured,

Adalwolfa

raised her fist high and pumped it twice to signal

her war-hand 

before beginning her advance.  Today she was going

to finish

the job her warrior-monk great-grandfather 

Who obviously didn't really care about his vows.

Which leads us to ask why he became a monk. 

The travels? The uniform? The Glamour?

Free bed and board at monasterys all over Europe?



@@As I mentioned in another post, the idea

of celibacy is relatively recent. The original

prohibition was against marriage, not sex.

The church didn't want divided loyalties

and they did want property (which would

have been left to families if they allowed

marriage)



Additionally, in this case, her grand-father was

far from home with no chance of ever returning.

His only chance of destroying the

necromancer was to pass the job along

to his progeny.  As far as "vows", I never

indicated which order the grand-father was

associated with so there is no way to know

what his "vows" were. OR what additional

vows he may have taken before leaving home.



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 Death rested lightly on her soul. The

thought of failure

turned her bowls 

bowels?



@@Ooops, again. ^_*





     Seven days it had taken her. Seven days

without food,

drink or sleep. Yet she felt as if she'd just

begun. She'd been

terrified that any inattention to her task would

be taken as a

lack of faith by Kwannon and her son would die. As

she had

told the monk, she had no skills as an artesian

artisan? But I assume she wouldn't be a very skilled

well either.



@@Ah HA. That's the "e" that used to

be in "bowls". It must have fallen out and

rolled down here. 





<SNIP>





Ranjit: (m) Strong, intense      [Sikh]

As I recall there's no language called Sikh, I think

they

usually speak Panjabi.



@@True, but I thought more people

would recognize [Sikh] than would

recognize [Panjabi] I'll correct this

by using both in the next publication

of end-notes (last chapter)



Notes on "The Amazon Nation":

I'm assuming the Chinese Amazons are the remnants

of a

group of the original Amazons that, according to

legend,

were captured in battle and carried of into

slavery. On

One could, however, bring up several arguments that

the

Chinese Amazons originate from one of the all-female

units

of the Tai-Ping rebellion in the mid-19th century.



@@ But I didn't. For one thing it wouldn't 

mesh with my story line. For another,

my reading of the Anime/manga

give the impression of a much

older culture. 



But unless someone demands it, I won't.



board ship they killed their captors.

Unfortunately the

Amazons weren't sailors and couldn't find their

way

home. I've changed the legend slightly by assuming

that,

for various reasons, they or their descendants

eventually ended up in China. I've used

But how did they end up in Qinghai? It's pretty hard

to get

there by boat.



@@I never said they got there "by boat". I only

said that in the original legend a group of 

Amazons were on board a boat and, after

killing the crew, couldn't find their way home.

In the original, they made landfall and eventually

intermarried with the natives. In my version they

kept wandering until they ended up in Qinghai.

Actually they were NORTH of Qinghai until

the "daemon" destroyed their home.



several existing or past  mountain cultures as a

template to build the present day Chinese Amazons.

I'm

Most sources I have seen places the original Amazons

in Scythia

(north of the Black Sea), making them more likely to

be

"horse nomads" than mountain people. Of course, they

would

have to adapt when moving to their current location.



@@Very true. I bring up a little of this in later 

chapters. A mention of "horse bows" I think.

But there's not a lot of use for "horse nomads"

in the mountains.



<SNIP>

@@Again, thanks for writing.

I'll make corrections ASAP.

0_^ 





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