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From: "Glazius Falconar" <GlaziusFalconar@peoplepc.com>
To: <ffml@fanfic.com>
Sent: Tuesday, November 14, 2000 6:14 AM
Subject: [FFML] Re: [SLR] Synopses List for October 20
You know, sometimes you just don't look hard enough...
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Title: One War Three Sisters Sidestory: Voice of the Phoenix
Series: Ranma (X-com, Starcraft)
Anyway, the first thing I _really_ wondered about here was why I couldn't
build Protoss Healers. Heh. That said...
The 'Protoss Healer' is of course Adam Brown's creation. I merely built
upon his work.
Well, the first reaction a Protoss _anything_ would have to a warrior in
Akane's condition would be to stick her into a Dragoon. This would
probably
_not_ be a palatable option given the psychological condition, but I
imagine
there are ways (an Arbiter's stasis-generator or even a converted Ghost
lockdown canister rifle) to get around a rampaging Dragoon.
Then again, this means flying in the face of the story itself. Que sera.
This was Mr. Brown's decision, and it adds a lot to the overall story. I
merely
added a bit of backstory. That Akane is Phoenix was fact when I wrote this.
To be frank, if Akane WAS a Dragoon, I feel the overall story would be
diminished and a lot of potential interpersonal conflict would be lost.
As a near-human, she has a lot more potential to make things...
interesting... for her sisters and brother in-law.
Second, I have to wonder what point in Protoss history the story is
catching
them. Correct me if I'm misremembering the manual, but I seem to remember
a
period of ideological conflict in the Protoss over whether or not they
were
a superior race and, perhaps, the only creation that should exist. Halos
seems to be a throwback to that era - again, forgive the confusion, but
the
manual's at home and I'm an hour's drive away. And I have no car. Ah heh.
There are in any society, in any time period, beings who hold
long-discredited
beliefs sacred. I feel Halos is such a 'throwback'.
Even if it's _all_ they retain, a fallen Protoss warrior keeps their mind
and will within the confines of a Dragoon; admittedly, this steps outside
that racial boundary, but given the importance of dedication to the
Khala...
well. But then, I'm working off of remembered knowledge, and you actually
_wrote_ the story. So.
Again, I was providing a description of events integral to the story of
another.
I COULD see some discussion or thought of making Akane a Dragoon, but
would they? She's not even REALLY Protoss after all. Could she even be
made one?
Akane's "I... hate... ALIENS!" line is classic, I have to admit.
Just adapted from the original source material.
And the
story paints a wonderful picture of the slow dissection of the soul, and,
with the exception of a few spelling errors in convenient places, ("Toady"
instead of "today" _really_ threw me)
I would put this more in the realm of typographic error. I know the meaning
of both words but there comes a point in a writing project where little
things
like that escape even ardent search. Thanks for spotting it, however.
the story itself is handled very well,
given the personalities of the characters involved.
Thanks.
*****
Mea culpa, yo - looked in the wrong section of the site for this - but I
think the "archived-at" field is for pointing out the exact location of
your
story. I might be wrong. And I still have no idea why this didn't show
when
I looked up "phoenix" at the archives...
--GF
Thanks very much for your input.
Kevin D. Hammel
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