Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][Ranma]A Change of Scene, Chapters 89-90 revised
From: "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>
Date: 11/11/2000, 1:42 PM
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Talk about late:





"Nabiki!  Hey, Nabiki, stop!"



"Don't put your tongue in there. It's dirty."





Tatewaki stopped walking, but Nabiki continued on.  Only the fact that

they

were holding hands made her notice he wasn't walking any more.



Yeah. Since their limbs are non-detatchable, I would hope so.





Mike nodded.  "Sure.  I have my stuff with me.  We really need to get this

done."  He opened his mouth to tease Nabiki about her reunion with her

boyfriend, but thought better of it.  Perhaps he would be better off

waiting

until the project was complete.



Probably.









Allison held up her hands, palms out.  "Please, call me Allison.  The

children in my junior high school class call me Miss Rose, and it makes me

feel terribly old!"



Ranma; Well, that's because you are.





When Akane pushed the apartment door open a very strange sight met her

eyes.

Two dark heads were bent over a book.  Then both of the people at the

table

straightened up and began laughing.  Akane couldn't help but notice that

the

young woman was very pretty, and that Ranma seemed quite comfortable with

her.



[Down, girl.  Down!] Akane had to tell herself, as her grip tightened on

the

bag she was holding almost to the point of destroying her and Ranma's

dinner.  [She's a tutor, NOT a fiancee!]



Ranma: Hey, hon. Guess what? It turns out my mom and an old friend of hers

sort of made this promise about joining their two families. And it also

turns out this friend was an American...





"That's no problem, Akane.  Allison is joining our self-defense class next

week."



"She what?"



Why is Akane surprised? No one taking the class?





*****



Nodoka looked at the clock.  By this time, Akane should be in her bread

making class,



They have classes where they teach making bread? Do they have Basketweaving

101 as well?



 and Ranma should be running his errands.  Now was the time to

move.



By her estimation, it would take several hours for Akane and her class to

mix and knead the bread dough, allow it to rise, shape it, allow it to

rise

again, and bake it.  That would give her plenty of time to get Ranma and

Ukyo together.



Heh. It would take a whole lot longer than that, dearie.







Nodoka watched as Ranma pulled Ukyo into his arms and whispered something

to

her.  Whatever it was, it had quite an effect on the girl, because she

stopped crying, hugged Ranma hard, and whispered something back.  Now was

the time to move.



"I'm so glad you two have resolved your differences!  For a while I was

quite concerned that the two of you would never get together!"



Heh. Nice try.





"It had better be a good one, Mom!  I told you before that I won't cheat

on



*****



Don't need that star line there. Still the same scene







Ranma slowly counted to ten.  It didn't help.  "Get out."  His mother just

stood there, looking incredulous.



"What did you say?"



"I said, get out."



"You're taking Akane's side against me, your own mother?  How could you?"



Ranma; Because she puts out.





Chapter 89



Akane stood in the doorway, her customary 'I caught Ranma with another

woman' expression on her face.   Ukyo was amused to see that Ranma wore

his

usual 'Don't hit me!  I didn't do anything!' look on HIS face.   Then her

amusement faded.  If Akane hit Ranma, it would be her fault.



"Ranma's mother brought me here, Akane, and I didn't come to do any harm."



*****



And here





resembling confusion.  He jumped on the opportunity and took his wife's

hands, leading her to the nearest chair.



"Let Ukyo talk, Akane.  I want to know what's going on, too."



"But why isn't she in the hospital?



"...Lobotomized or something?"





*****



Ukyo took a deep breath and closed her eyes.  This was not going to be

easy.



"Akane, I told Ranma that my doctor has been helping me to understand the

difference between fantasy and reality.



Ukyou: Fantasy is when someone turns into a girl with a splash of water and

people have statues routinely broken across their heads and they're

uninjured.



 >

"Where are you going?"



"Back to the restaurant.  It's nearly time to open for lunch, and I'm sure

your mother won't be there."



"Do you want us to walk you?"



"You know, rub your face into the fact that the man you love is happily

married to someone else."



*****



"Surely you remember how peaceful it was in our home when Father was away?



"With me running around with my bokken and loudly declaring my love for

Akane and the pig-tailed girl."







Akane searched for Ranma for an hour before giving up.  If he didn't want

to

be found, he wouldn't be.



True







She didn't know if she could face him.  He had warned her not to go

forward

with her plans, and she hadn't listened.  What would he say to her?



Genma: Dumb bitch.







"I hate to say it, but I did warn you."



The trickle of tears grew into full-blown weeping.  "He hates me!  My son

hates me!"



At the moment.



"Man, something's wrong.  I'm surprised they even showed up."



Once they were all in Shiro's car and on their way to the park, Ranma made

a

little effort to talk,



I'd say 'made an effort' The little just doesn't work real well there for

me.



*****



Tokiwa Park was crowded and noisy.  The foursome's first stop was at one

of

the many food stands, where they all got a light snack.



"What's the first stop?"



at one of the many foodstands (You just said that in the previous sentence.

I'd change either the question or the wording in the sentence before.)





"Look, do me a favor.  Don't play again, okay!"



Ranma handed one of the stuffed penguins to Akane and the other to

Shampoo.

"We gonna go on a ride, or what?"



"We're starting with the Ferris wheel," replied Akane.  Her tone of voice

told the others that she didn't expect an argument.  When they got into

line

Shiro separated Akane from the others, while Shampoo took Ranma's arm.



Heh. This might work.





"Ranma, you have headache?"



"I'm fine."



Shampoo let go of his arm and whacked him lightly.



Heh





Behind them, Akane was whispering to Shiro.  His eyebrows rose in surprise

and then he smiled and nodded at her.  Ranma turned around in time to see

Akane's smile, and to see her lips form the words 'thank you'.  What was

she

thanking him for?



The wheel slowed down and stopped, and the people in the bottommost



Is that really a word?



The pair remained silent for a while as the boats traveled on.

Eventually,

Ranma looked down at Akane.  She seemed to be a little calmer than she had

been when they got into the boats, as she sat hugging the stuffed penguin.



"Do you remember the day you went to the cemetery, and I followed you?"



Akane: I never went to a cemetery.



Ranma; Oh. Must have been some other girl then.







Ranma stood there with Akane.  The both of them were smiling.



Both of them (sounds better to me)







Nodoka cleared away the breakfast dishes and wondered at her husband's

silence.  He had been very quiet since their return to their own home.



"Husband, is something wrong?"



"No, nothing.  I was just thinking."



"Of what?"



Genma looked up.  "Ranma.  I believe it's time we told him the truth."



"But--"



"Yes?"



"I thought you didn't want him to know."



Uh oh. Adopted?







*****



Early the next morning Nabiki opened her eyes and took in her

surroundings.

She looked at her sleeping companion and picked up his hand.  His wedding

ring shone dully in the dim light.



"What have I done?" she whispered to herself.  Then she smiled and curled

her fingers around his.



[The right thing,] she thought as she went back to sleep.



Heh. Cute



Nice work. Sorry it took so long for me to get to it.



D.B. Sommer









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