I don't wanna beat this to death, but....
"Graham Kemp" <gj_kemp@hotmail.com> wrote:
FYI, it was established in the manga (the Yoiko story) that Ryoga's
family (1) has a dog, not a cat, and (2) are away from home lost just as
much as Ryoga himself, if not more. It's your fic, obviously, and your
decision what to change, but it's rather annoying to have a character
pointing out Genma's faults when her own are being ignored. By all
indications, the Hibikis are far worse parents than Genma.
Annoying, but realistic. Even in real life a lot of people point out
other peoples' faults while ignoring their own, and it happens all the
time in the Ranma universe.
eg: "Aiya! Why Ranma want violent girl?" Shampoo asked as she
burst through the wall. Pointing at Akane she cried, "is
obstacle; Shampoo kill!"
Well, yes, but the difference there, I think, is that though Shampoo is
ignoring her own faults in your little scene, the story itself is not.
It's clearly shown that Shampoo *is* violent even though she herself
doesn't admit it. If you'd shown Shampoo lecturing Akane on violence,
all the while avoiding any indication of any sort in your story that
she's calling the kettle black, I'd more than likely have the same
problem that I did here.
Gary Kleppe
http://www.akane.org/gary/comics.html