Subject: [FFML] Re: [FanFic][Ranma] Le canard a la Pekin
From: "D.F. Roeder" <dfroeder@flash.net>
Date: 10/28/2000, 9:34 AM
To: "FFML" <ffml@fanfic.com>, "DB Sommer" <sommer@3rdm.net>

 >About time I got to this.

S'all right.



 >> Le canard a la Pekin
 >
 >'The Pecking Canary'. Nice title. Ain't it great how five
 >years of German
 >has allowed me to translate the title so easily?

I am reminded of the old saying about a little knowledge being
dangerous. ^_-  Of course, this simply does NOT apply to use of
Japanese in anime fanfic. *Shakes head firmly.* Nope, not at all.

^_^




 >> The lunch rush had ended, and the best ramen house in
 >Nerima stood
 >> empty for the moment.
 >
 >Ironically, it was an 'International House of Pancakes.'

I hear their Super Soba omelets are quite popular... Just stay away
from the Jusenkyou syrup...




 >> It had been a tough and long lunch. The persistence of the male
 >> Japanese libido never ceased to amaze Shampoo, and
 >she'd been forced
 >> to bend three different pieces of rebar into pretzels,
 >one each for
 >> three different crowds, to get them to quit trying to pinch her
 >> rear... or other parts best left unmentioned,
 >
 >like her grandmother's rear.

Oog. Let's not go there... Let's not even say that we did. ;)



 >not that it would keep
 >> them at bay for long. It wasn't good for business to
 >pound on paying
 >> customers, and running that gauntlet for three hours
 >without release
 >> had left her tense and irritable.
 >
 >Hopefully they at least tip well for the eye-candy. :)

:)



 >> The tinkle of the front door bell
 >
 >'jingle' sounds better to me. I get the image of someone
 >taking a leak when
 >you say 'tinkle'

Ah, the demon of unfortunate word association rears it's horned
head.




 >> "I can't BELIEVE he ate all THREE of them, and didn't
 >leave ANY for
 >> the rest of us!" Shampoo could hear Akane and two
 >others sit down,
 >> chairs scraping against the tiled floor.
 >
 >Well, Soun's a greedy bastard that way.

*BUZZ!* You have two more tries. Please insert token for additional
playing time...

Somewhere in an alternate universe, Ten Yen Ranma-chan shudders.





 >> Shampoo stuck her head out of the kitchen. <Gack!> It
 >was the whole
 >> gaggle of Tendou sisters, but no Ranma. *Sigh.* Ranma
 >could pinch
 >> her rear anytime he wanted... and other places, too.
 >
 >But not her grandmother's rear. Mousse's rear she
 >supposed she could let
 >slide, though.

You're going there. Didn't we talk about not doing this? ;)




 >> "Now, Akane," Kasumi smoothly said, "I'm sure Ranma-kun had good
 >> reason for being so hungry, and he did say he was
 >sorry. He does get
 >> a lot of exercise, you know. Besides, if he hadn't eaten them,
 >> Saotome-no-ojisama certainly would have." There was just the
 >> slightest hint of disapproval in Kasumi's voice.
 >
 >She'd have to spank Genma on general principles later.

Nodoka: Sorry, Kasumi-chan, but if anyone is going to spank Genma--

Genma:  Oh, Mistress! Again!

Nodoka:  [coloring slightly]  Mind our secrets, Genma. I'll have to
punish you for that later.

Genma:  Wai!

:P




 >> Out of excuses to delay, Shampoo strode out of the
 >kitchen to see
 >> Akane and Nabiki looking at Kasumi with half-lidded eyes.
 >>
 >> "Shampoo take order now?" The lethal Amazon flipped
 >open her pastel
 >> order pad.
 >
 >and drove her pencil through Nabiki's eye. (You did say
 >she was lethal :P)

...  My, did you hear what happened to DB?

No!

A squad of Amazons reached out of his computer screen and yanked him
into one of his fanfic worlds.

Hmmm...




 >> "I can't imagine what the reason for being so hungry
 >could be. No
 >> one's attacked in days."
 >
 >Bit wordy. I'd shorten it to. "I can't imagine why he was
 >so hungry. No
 >one's...'

Agreed.




 >Akane sniffed and opened her menu.
 >>
 >> "Maybe he just really likes duck," Nabiki offered,
 >opening her own
 >> menu. "I like duck."
 >>
 >> "Well, so do *I*, but THREE whole ducks?! I mean, honestly!"
 >
 >Shampoo: Shampoo agree. From the size of Akane thighs, it
 >no look like she
 >eat more than two ducks for every meal.
 >
 >Kasumi: Now that was a rude thing to say.
 >
 >Shampoo: Shampoo sorry.
 >
 >Kasumi: You're right about it, of course, but it was
 >still a rude thing to
 >say.
 >
 >Akane: Hey!

Hehehehehehe.




 >> "They did have a very savory aroma," Kasumi observed.
 >>
 >> "Yeah, and they weren't cheap, either." Nabiki set her
 >menu down,
 >> frowning.
 >
 >If she's frowning I take it she hasn't gotten her sisters
 >to agree to pay
 >for the bill here. :)

Not yet, anyway. ^_^




 >> "There's nothing quite like a well-cooked Peking Duck,"
 >Kasumi said.
 >>
 >> "Shampoo like duck." She then jumped, wondering why
 >she'd even tried
 >> to join the conversation.
 >
 >Wouldn't be much of a fic if she didn't. :)

Point.




 >> The Tendou sisters blinked at her, and then as one,
 >turned to look
 >> at Mousse. Mousse was frozen in mid-table wipe, trying
 >to decide if
 >> what Shampoo had said was good or bad for him.
 >
 >Bad, stupid. :)

Heh.




 >> Shampoo rolled her eyes. "Tendou Akane? What your order?"
 >
 >Akane: Leave Ranma alone?
 >
 >Shampoo: No have that on menu. But nice try

Akane: Leave ME alone?

Shampoo:  Why? When you so cute. *Nuzzle, nuzzle*

Akane:  ACK!

DFR:  Okay, I had a brief attack, but I'm better now and the
underwear are back in the drawer.

Happi:  One of my best students!

Cast:  Ooooog...




 >> Shampoo momentarily drifted away on dreamy thoughts of
 >Akane wed to
 >> Mousse, leaving Shampoo to comfort Ranma after having
 >been rejected
 >> by the kitchen destroyer. <Aiyaa! It's perfect!>
 >
 >Well, only if you place some 'Veils Over Others' Eyes'.
 >
 >Hell, no, that wasn't a plug. Stop being paranoid. Nobody
 >likes a paranoid.
 >Especially the people out to get them.

/me slaps DB around a bit with a large trout...

:)

Hey, get them plugs in when ya can! :)




 >> "Akane like duck?" Shampoo interrupted Akane's
 >explanation, much to
 >> the latter's annoyance. "Shampoo give Akane Mousse for free."
 >
 >Akane: No thanks. I like my hair just fine. But nice try.

Running gags. Gotta love 'em!  ^_^



 >> Cologne was surprised at just how much fun living in
 >Nerima could
 >> be. She smiled as the conversation in the dining area started up
 >> again.
 >
 >Heh.

:)  Although that one paragraph has been edited out.



 >> "Well," Akane offered, "I guess we'll just have to take
 >your word
 >> for that, then. No duck? Are you sure?"
 >
 >Shampoo: Akane can eat Mousse if she that desperate for
 >it. He probably
 >enjoy it. He act like no one go down on him for years.

Yes, folks! The closet, self-denying H contingent has entered the
auditorium.  ^_-

Mihoshi:  Make that 'teasing', too! I wanted some of Tenchi in
Vacation Days, darn it!

Aeka and Ryouko:  [glaring down at Tenchi from their respective
demonheads]

Tenchi:  ... Aheh.




 >> Akane smirked at having elicited a slip of annoyance
 >from Shampoo
 >> and turned back to her menu. "Well, hang on a minute. I
 >gotta read
 >> tha menu."
 >>
 >> Kasumi's eyes peered reprovingly from over the top of
 >her own menu.
 >> "Speech, Akane."
 >
 >Speech? What's that supposed to mean?

She's chiding Akane for her rough speech habits, that seem to be
occurring thanks to Ranma's presence. However, I can see that it is
not especially clear. Will revise for clarity.



 >> "*I* don't have a problem with duck. What's YOUR problem with
 >> duck?!"
 >>
 >> "Shampoo no have problem with DUCK!
 >
 >Shampoo pulled out a sword. "But Akane going to have all
 >the 'duck' she can
 >handle if she no place order soon and Shampoo start
 >swinging at head."

Heh.




 >> Shampoo steamed at Akane, but nodded. "Is BIRD! ALL is
 >bird!" She
 >> raised her abused order pad and smiled thinly. "So, one garlic
 >> chicken for Naaa-biii-kiii?"
 >>
 >> Nabiki cocked an eyebrow at Shampoo's pronunciation,
 >
 >Considering how everyone butchers Shampoo's name,
 >Nabiki's got nothing to
 >gripe about. :)

Heh. True, although I doubt Nabs would bother to see it that way...
unless you paid her to, of course. ^_^




 >> "Ranma really likes duck," Akane said on a long shot,
 >wondering if
 >> she could goad Shampoo into anything further. She succeeded.
 >>
 >> "FINE! Airen want duck?! Airen go marry MOUSSE!"
 >
 >And somewhere in Nerima, Ranma looked over the koi rod he
 >had finally
 >rediscovered. All he had to do now would be to 'Cast a
 >Second Line in the
 >Sea' and Mousse would finally be his at last.

Cast-Ryouga:  But... But, RANMA-CHAN!

Cast-Ranma:  Sorry, pork butt. I got a hankering for some Peking--
er, hankering for a Chinese man. *Smacks lips as her stomach
growls.*

C-Ryouga:  But... But... I gotta a whole roll of ten yen coins!

C-Ranma:  *WHAM!*  Wrong fic, bacon breath.

Mousse:  RANMAAA! How DARE you abuse kawaii Ryouga-chan!! DIIIIIE!!!

Ranma:  ....

(Okay, I think I've firmly gotten even the most remote of yaoi urges
out of my system... :)




 >> "HEY!" Mousse finally had to comment.
 >
 >Kasumi: But it would certainly settle some issues around
 >here. Might raise a
 >few others, though.

Hmmm...




 >> "... ... Shampoo not say that. Nope. Is old Joketsuzoku
 >technique.
 >> Make you THINK you hear that."
 >
 >Heh

Heh. That was one of the first bits I thought of for this fic.




 >> The pencil in Shampoo's hand snapped in two. "Then TAKE
 >MOUSSE OR
 >> ORDER SOMETHING ON MENU!"
 >>
 >> "You donn't
 >
 >don't

Yup. Snagged that one already, but thanks. I might not have.




 > have to SHOUT IT!" Akane rejoined, genuinely miffed.
 >>
 >> "WHAT... What you want, then?! Mousse or food?! Yes?!"
 >>
 >> Akane blinked and looked at the blind boy, who was
 >blinking back at
 >> her. "Mousse?" she said querulously. "Why would I--"
 >
 >Well, he's one of the few guys around that puts no
 >demands on you or craves
 >your attention, therefore gaining the least of your ire.
 >Hey, it could work.
 >:)

AKANE:  MOUSSE!

MOUSSE:  ACK!

AKANE:  Will you promise to obey me, cherish me, and love me until I
die... putting aside all others and the, ahem, occasional mallet,
shinai, bokken, stone lantern, dinner table, tanuki...

MOUSSE:  *piku piku*  AKANE! MY LOVE!

SHAMPOO:  ...  Shampoo hit you plenty! What going on?! ... Shampoo
confused over development.




 >> "What?!" Mousse was still trying to assimilate the strange
 >> conversation.
 >
 >That might take a while.

Or maybe not. He's about to get some visual aids in the form of twin
bonbori. ^_^




 > "But, Shampoo!"
 >>
 >> "Look, you bimbo!" Akane growled.
 >
 >That was it. Shampoo decided to let her have it. "< And
 >somehow is it my
 >fault plebians such as yourselves are reduced to speaking
 >solely in your own
 >inherent barbaric tongue rather than learning a civilized
 >language that is
 >spoken by nearly a sixth of the world? Why must it be
 >that I am set upon by
 >the vast forces of this universe, nay, impaled by the
 >daggers of humanity's
 >ignorance and am forced to employ a language that holds
 >no interest for one
 >as incredibly beautiful as the sea, nay, as the stars themsel-->"
 >
 >Her diatribe was cut short by a thrown pan that connected
 >with the back of
 >her head. Cologne poked her head from out fo the kitchen.
 >"How many times
 >must I tell you to speak in Japanese? By all the gods
 >child, you're worse
 >than Kunou when you use our native tongue. I should have
 >thrown you in the
 >spring of drowned mute."

HAHAHAHA!!! Well, can't think of any better response to that. ^_^




 >> "ARGH! I don't WANT Mousse! As a husband OR ingredients!"
 >>
 >> "Why not? He make FINE duck-- er, airen for Akane!"
 >
 >He's a versitile guy.

I am suddenly reminded of that book that was so popular a while back
and for such a suitably short period of time: 101 Uses for a Dead
Cat.

Shampoo:  *shudder*




 >> "ACK!!" Mousse squawked again and plastered himself against the
 >> wall, laid out like a large fowl about to be de-boned.
 >>
 >> "Shampoo want TALK to you! You be airen to Akane!"
 >>
 >> "HEY!" Akane shouted. "That's NOT what I MEANT!!"
 >
 >But that's what you're going to get. :)

^_^




 >> "Guys sunbathe topless, and I'm a guy,"
 >
 >A guy with big knockers, but still a guy.

Details, details... :)




 > she grumbled to herself.
 >> <Too bad Tendou-san doesn't see it that way...> But she
 >then smiled
 >> as the sun started warming her. There was just
 >something about the
 >> way she felt when sunning in this body that was just so
 >utterly...
 >> pleasant that she wished she could do it completely nude. She
 >> grinned naughtily, but decided not to put name to any
 >other feelings
 >> she might be having.
 >
 >Especially since this isn't labeled 'Lime' :)

BINGO!!!

/me hands DB a cigar.




 >> Genma-panda growled and held up a sign. <"For the FIFTH
 >TIME! Quit
 >> ogling my son!"> The panda grumped to himself as the
 >sign flipped
 >> around in time to a noise from his stomach. <"Dratted,
 >ungrateful
 >> boy! Didn't even leave me any duck!">
 >
 >Heh. Cute.
 >
 >D.B. Sommer

Thanks for the commentary, DB. Greatly appreciated.

- Dave

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