Mass Review:
Well, Komodo has finally finished this.
Yes! *Whew!*
First of all, typos galore
Ah. . .yes. . .the typos. . .um. . .::hapless grin:: oops?
and the format is a bit nasty. Please try to leave
a space between the line of asterisk and the end of a scene. Well-done,
but as always, could have been better. Dialogue was a bit nice, though.
Thank you. I seem to be better at dialouge then I am with description.
This has potential but as always polish is needed.
Yes, never enough polish. Of course, I find if I polish too much, it loses
some of it's spirit.
Speaking of polish, I'd like to take a moment to publicly thank Angus McSpon
who was paitent enough to help me, by E-mail, over the course of a week, put
some polish on the epilouge. Thank you very much McSpon-san.
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Agreeable Komodo
(Otakus Nodateus)
He who buys it, uses it.
Just say yes to prophylactics.