Good comments, mostly, but you improperly corrected some
perfectly fine English.
Warr wrote:
"Ana Puma." Akane set about applying a *deep* red
lipstick.
Ah, coolio.
No, Ana Puma. The two have *completely* different looks.
The hair, for one. <snigger>
The bouncer told Nabiki the party was on the fifth floor.
Why'd they have to take the elevator?
Because the party wasn't in their room, but in a lounge on a
different floor; that's mentioned somewhere, but I forget where.
Akane nodded. "Condoms... I thought..."
"You were expecting this?!?!" Ranma asked,
incredulously.
Don't need the quotation marks after 'thought..."' because Ranma
continues speaking in the next paragraph.
No, it's Akane who says "Condoms... I thought..."
"So will you and Saotome-san still be getting married
any time soon?" Belldandy asked.
anytime
No, "any time" is correct. Belldandy is asking, "Will you be getting
married in the immediate future?" "Anytime" means "at any time
whatsoever", so your "correction" would have Belldandy asking, "I
presume you will be getting married at some point during the entire
life span of the universe?"
"Let's take this outside before we destroy any more of
my security deposit than we have to," Ranma sarcastically
sniped at his enemy.
anymore
Again, "any more" is correct. "Anymore" means "at the present time"
or "any longer", referring to a time or duration. "Any more" means
"any quantity beyond that which already exists", which is clearly
the meaning here.
"How did you get here, P-chan?" Akane cooed to the
piglet. "And where is Ryouga-kun?"
Who was it that just commented that complete obliviouslness
takes skill?
Sorry, I didn't notice. <snicker>
"There!" Skuld gleefully shouted, waving her sensor.
"There's another one!" she cried, pointing to P-chan who was
trying to give Ranma a red-eye from his position in between
Akane's vinyl clad breasts.
Give Ranma a late night plane ride? Or an eveeeel-eye?
"Red-eye" is the colloquial term for the Japanese insult of
pulling down the lower eyelid and going "biiii-dah!" at someone.
Ryouga blanched and turned green at Akane's
imprecations. He stood, only to be angrily slapped. He watched
having trouble with your ls? ;> implecations
First off, "implecation" isn't even a word. You probably mean
"implication", which means "a statement suggesting a logical
relationship between two propositions". "Imprecation", on the
other hand, means "the invocation of evil upon, a curse". I
think it's obvious that the author had the word he wanted.
"Oh, Nabiki, your tree costume was very cute! You
should have stayed for the kareoke. You would have been a big
hit."
karaoke
Oh, you missed one, up above, when you were flagging the spelling
of "partiers".
I'm just wondering why Ranma didn't ask to be cured. If Skuld
could turn it on and off, why can't she just leave it off?
She wasn't turning it on and off. She was triggering/toggling
it. There's a difference.
-- Bob
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