Hey Chris,
Glad to see that you finally come back to this story. : )
Couple comments and one quote stolen (paraphrased as best as I
could remember) from So I Married An Axe Murderer.
Kasumi bit her bottom lip. "Regardless of how Ukyou feels for
him, she *is* one of Ranma's best friends. She's known him since he was
very little."
I don't know about 'best' friend. She is his oldest friend, though.
Which can work along the same lines.
Kasumi smiled and put her hands back in her lap. "All right. My
friend, Mako, has a younger brother about your age. I want you to spend
the rest of your life with him without any previous visits or knowing
even what he looks like. Regardless of your first impression, I'm going
to ask that you treat him with devotion and honor, and be a good wife
to him regardless of how he treats you and how faithful he acts."
My friend Mako has -- Kasumi isn't talking directly to her, so...
Megumi crossed her arms over her chest and leaned up against the
tile wall. "It's not a furo, but it's still pretty nice."
Don't you generally cross your arms under your chest? ;>
Ranma smiled and hesitantly nodded. "Okay, I can live with that."
Still, Ranma felt the need to repay her kindness, "Hey, do you think
you'd like a martial arts lesson sometime?"
"Sure!" Megumi tousled his hair and walked back through the
bathroom into her own room. "Goodnight, Ranma."
Charlie McKenzie sez, "You know we have martial arts in Scottland? It's
called Fuk-u! But it's mostly just head butting and rolling around on
the ground."
Ranma's angry expression suddenly became uncertain. He thought he
would be able to stand up to her when she started crying.
Uncertain about this sentence... He thought he would be able to stand up
to her until she started crying?
Looking forward to the later chapters, especially the new one.
Warr
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