Andrew Wilson wrote:
longer was her the fair-minded martial artist. Now she was a predator whose
was she
Soun coughed. "I don't have a choice. Your mother has been waiting for me these past ten years. It is time for me to be with her again. Be strong, my daughters."
Knowing that his family was safe, Soun Tendo passed into the afterlife a >content man.
So... what caused him to die? Wounds from Happosai, overexertion, what?
Soun's death seems a bit contrived, and even Genma's is to a certain extent.
And as for killing the old farts. I was tempted for Kasumi to just find them >dead, but I got a message from a reader saying "Let Soun go down fighting to >protect his family. His devotion to his family is the one redeeming factor I >see in him."
Okay, what you did make a little more sense now, but it still strikes me as,
"Oh look... they're dead," if you catch my meaning.
Other than that nit, I like this chapter very well.