Glazius Falconar wrote:
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Title: The Final Straw
Genre: Drama
Author: JP Buckner
Email: ajaff@poky.srv.net
Homepage: http://onewest.net/~ajaff/ranff.htm
Archived at http://onewest.net/~ajaff/final.txt
Date Sent to FFML: August 30, 2000
Archive Number: 13902
Size: 25 KB
Summary:
Someone wakes up in a 'prison'. The arrival of the 'jailer' forces the
memories of how this happened.
...hmm. It _is_ an interesting concept, I'll grant, but I'm afraid I'll have
to echo some earlier commentary that Genma developed the Umisenken and
Yamasenken and still knows the both of them like the back of his hand. Paw.
Whatever. Genma probably would actually enjoy this - maybe have him wander
away and start playing with a tire in the middle of Soun's monologue, or
actions to that effect; no prison can hold an Anything Goes Thief for long.
I wanted to take this opportunity to...
1) Thank everyone who sent me quality C&C on this story. This was my first
attempt at fan fiction, and I know it showed. I received a lot of quality
comments, and have done some revisions to the story. I will not repost the
revised story to the group, but I will say that...
2) The revision, which does try to deal with this issue, and others, can be
found
at http:\\onewest.com\~ajaff\final.txt. I also sent it to r.a.a.c. on Sunday, so
hopefully soon it will be there.
I definately again want to thank everyone who commented. This seems to be
a good group here, and I hope any future stories I write will be helped as
much from all of you as The Final Straw was.
JP Buckner