On Thu, 14 Sep 2000, Jamie and Bridget Wilde wrote:
I thought I'd write and say that I've enjoyed this 'fic so far, with a
few minor and not so minor beefs.
THE GOOD:
You've captured the flavor of the Shadow and his dark world well. Kudos.
Using the Musk Dynasty instead of the descendent of Genghis Khan. A good
use of the Ranma source material.
Verily.
THE BAD:
Is it really that important to have the story set in 1940? First of all,
it makes Cologne more than just a touch too old for the character you've
portrayed so far. Second of all, if you wanted tension between the
United States and Japan, there was plenty of that throughout the 1930s,
and even as far back as the the mid 1920s, American military planners
were considering an eventual war with the Japanese Empire.
Forced to agree here too.
THE UGLY:
The idea that the Shadow, with at most sixteen rounds of .45 caliber
hardball loaded in his nickel-plated rods, could shatter the block of
cement Cologne's feet were encased in is ludicrous. Better to have one
of his minions come and free her later, and that way you could have a
scene where Cologne and the henchman compare the rings they've been
given.
'e did it in the movie.
Jamie
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