Miashara wrote:
On Mon, 14 Aug 2000, DB Sommer posted a fic that took me less than a
measely month to get around to replying on. Is that so bad?
(DB looks at his own backlog.) Nope.
were still attending classes at school. Skuld had been recalled Above
for
some technical problem Yggadrasil was having. And Urd was off doing...
well
whatever it was she did when she wasn't at home. Hopefully, she was at
least keeping out of mischief. Well meaning mischief, to be certain, but
mischief all the same. It did tend to help keep things interesting
though.
Thus laying thr ground work what everyone knows is impending chaos.
Wouldn't be much of a fic if it wasn't.
"Hello, my name is Chipple Ellington."
"I'm a stripper. Some guy named Kei hired me and told me he wanted some
action. You know where I should go?"
"Oh, I'll tell you where to go alright."
Got the right idea already, I see. :)
"And my name is Belldandy." She smiled and she bowed in greeting to the
girl.
"Is Keiichi in?" Chipple asked.
See!
Yep
"Not at the moment. Why don't you come in? He should be home before too
long." As Belldandy escorted her into the entryway, she wondered who
this
young girl that seemed to know Keiichi was. Belldandy was certain he had
never mentioned any Chipple to her before, and there was something about
her appearance that made Belldandy think she wasn't part of the auto
club.
It was the silk wedding gown. Bell was sure she'd remember that.
No dice. I already described what she was wearing. :P
"I... see," Belldandy said while not understanding in the least. "And
what
exactly is this practical exam you have to take?"
Bang Keiichi senseless.
Chipple: Well that sort of thing happened the last time I took one.
Belldandy's eyes widened in surprise. "You do? Are you certain that's
the
right boy? There are a lot of them in Japan, you know."
Somewhat surprising a reaction from Bell. This sorta thing, see Peorth
arc, isn't that surprising.
As I mentioned in the opening, my knowledge of OMG! is limited. Having never
read this part, I couldn't use it as a reference. I'll assume you're on the
ball with all of your comments about it.
"Absolutely. The information was magically imprinted so there could be
no
errors." Chipple turned thoughtful. "I sure hope I don't end up sleeping
with him like I did the last guy I was assigned to."
"You did what?" Belldandy asked, alarmed.
Again, after the way Bell reacted to Peorth, I'm frowning in disbelief.
I have a feeling you'll be doing that throughout the rest. *Sigh*
The rest was cut off as an attractive girl, about the same age as
Chipple,
burst into the temple. She was wearing a matching yellow skirt and
jacket
that was tight against her chest, showing an ample bust hidden
underneath.
Her eyes fell upon Chipple and she pointed an accusing finger at her.
"You
little rat, trying to get here early and put the moves on the new exam
before I get a chance to. I ought to fry you for that!
Ah, one of these.
Yep. Pretty much the standard 'Guy gets a wish from the beautiful girl' plot
to the hentai versions of genre
"Slut slut slut!" Chipple kept crying out until a flash of light filled
the
far side of the room, blinding everyone. When their vision cleared,
there
was a young girl, apparently about the same age as the others, floating
in
mid-air. She was adorned an outfit that was vaguely mid-eastern, like
something out of 1001 Arabian Knight, though with a billowing white
cape.
And behind door number three:
Heh
Belldandy was joined by the other three girls as they all examined the
picture. It was one of Belldandy and Keiichi, taken by the seashore with
both of them in conservative swimsuits.
"Yes, it is," the Goddess said with a hint of pride in her voice.
"He's cute," Chipple said with admiration.
Sigh. The second you're taken...
Eh?
"He certainly is good looking Suwatee remarked. "He reminds me of Kenta,
the last boy I gave a wish. I wonder if he's like him too and will wish
to
sleep with a bunch of girls."
Doesn't seem very pure of heart, this Kenta
Since he's a 'nice guy' sex with him is not a 'bad' thing. :)
"Then he'll probably wish to score with a bunch of girls like every
other
young man I've granted a wish to." Suwatee said with a sigh in her
voice.
"And usually I end up included in the mix."
So pure of heart has nothing to do with thinking with your balls. I'm one
step closer to wish land.
Heh
Suwatee nodded. "Luckily, due to the fact they're getting a wish, they
all
tend to be nice boys, but just a little on the horny side. The last one,
Kenta, was an especially nice one."
"He had this corkscrew manuver that just blew my mind."
My, my, you have a dirty mind too.
"Keiichi wouldn't sleep with anyone," Belldandy insisted.
"He's impotent?" Irene asked.
"NO!"
"No! No! No!"
"Really?"
"Well yes."
Heh. It would explain so very much.
"Then why wouldn't he want to wish to sleep with a bunch of good-looking
women?" Suwatee asked, completely devoid of any deviousness.
"He got this thing for zebras. He's not Gay, but you know..."
Hehehehe.
Suwatee gave a dismissive wave of her hand. "I've seen that sort of
thing
happen dozens of times. If you don't show them some solid proof up front
and ram it down their throats, they almost never believe it. Trust me,
if
he had a chance to really think about it and believed he was getting a
wish, he would have wanted a whole lot more than just you as his
girlfriend."
Now thats positively insulting.
Yep, inadvertently though.
"Keiichi's not that way!" Belldandy insisted. Further protests were cut
off
as a vortex of colors suddenly appeared in the middle of the group of
women.
"He's Bi!"
Achika still wouldn't be interested. :P
"Gee, I wonder who that could be?" Irene said dryly as the vortex took
on
the shape of a scantily clad, golden-haired, attractive woman who wore
a
tiny top and mini-skirt that were deep red and fringed with gold that
matched the color of her hair.
The newcomer posed dramatically before the quartet of women., "I am
Achika
Sansaro, Mistress of Virgins."
Virgin Men who don't want to be virgins anymore at that.
Bingo!
"Hey!" Irene shouted at Achika. "Why they heck are you hitting on her
when
you have someone as hot as me right here?" Irene thrust her chest
forward.
"Besides, she's sagging."
"I don't go for sluts, dearie," Achika explained.
And the shit hits the fan.
Well, Achika is right. She is a slut.
Belldandy drew back in surprise, as though noticing the damage for the
first time. "Oh dear. It looks like there was an explosion. I'll have to
fix it later when I'm recharged."
"Recharged? What did you use your energy on?" Keiichi inquired.
"Got laid."
No, no. It's not that kind of fic.
Basically, I can't really make myself see Bell acting this way, especially
under such comparatively minute provacation. Sorry.
No prob. Like I said, I've seen very little of the actual manga and knew
going in I might be off. Sorry.
AMS has my favorite characters, and while its not my favorite series of
anime, its right up there. As such, my opinions are probably larger than
I;d like them too be. However, I think this would work better in a
different series. I think Bell's reaction to those events would simply be
patience for a very long time, trusting in the Ultimate Force.
A pity the author is now behind the controls instead of the guy that
actually does the series, Muhhahahaha.
Chipple and Irene are from Magical Twilight (aka The Hex Files)
Suwatee is from CanCan Bunny
Achika is my own creation
Kaguya is from Rei Rei
And I haven't watched any of them. No sir. I heard about them from a
friend. I'm not a pervert.
Really.
Exactly. Neither am I.
See. We're pervs of a feather and whatnot.
Miashara
-Who really doesn't like saying he didn't like a fic, but trys to be
honest.
Nah. I prefer honesty to trying to gloss my feelings over. Wanting C+C means
taking the good with the bad. Sorry it didn't work for you. If this was a
meant to be a serious, piece, I'd redo things extensively as you suggested,
but since this is just a spammy short that is only there for laughs, I'm
going to let it go as is. Thanks for the comments anyway though. I
appreciate your candor
D.B. Sommer