Subject: [FFML] Re: [C&C][Sailor Moon] Sailor Moon Z #19
From: "Ranma Al'Thor" <ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu>
Date: 8/25/2000, 9:58 PM
To: Erik Schweitzer
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

On Fri, 25 Aug 2000, Erik Schweitzer wrote:

--- Ranma Al'Thor <ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu> wrote:

[SNIP]
 
*************

      "Dad said no," Daichi said to Himeko later in 
the day, after classes were over, but before dinner.
He looked around her room.  "Hey, where'd Pokota

      Artemis slipped out from under Minako's bed.  

"He was gone when I woke up."

      "Maybe they went on a date," Himeko said.
               ^^^^
They who?  (You might want to put Cassandra's name in
there somewhere.)

Doh.  Right.
 


<Sometimes a friend has to be a surgeon,> Manami 
said.  <Inflicting a little pain to spare you worse.
Her voice had a slightly stilted quality to it, the 
sound  of someone reciting, rather than speaking.  

      Hikaru blinked.  "Was that French or
something?"

The parts in <> did not appear in the e-mail.  When I 
downloaded the file and read it as a word doc, it was
there.  (I was using Yahoo mail when I read it; I did 
not try any other mail readers.)

Nod.  Anything that tries to interp. HTML will have problems with this, so
I think I will find a different notation.

 
[SNIP]

      "Abusing your powers to get As is bad," 
Cassandra said firmly.            ^^          

I think? that should be A's


's is always possessive, unless it's an abbreviation for 'is'

I think.
 
[SNIP]

Stinger Ace (Minako) were locked in hand to hand 
combat with hordes of mindless plant-men, 
Alexandrite's gospog, cut off from retreating to
join the others.  Princess Angelina Comtessa
Fireball the III 

It was noted who played all the other PC's.  I
believe the Comtessa is Usagi's character?

And is that supposed to be Comtessa, or should it be
Countessa?  (I just assumed it was a fictional title
the first time I read it.)

[SNIP]

Should be Comtessa.




lent Mars their power. She channeled it through the 
Hammer, praying to [Kami of Healing] to heal Daichi.
                      ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Should this be replaced with a specific deity?

Yes.  I screwed up.

 
No real comments.  Although I am looking forward to
ep.
20.  Sounds like it will be a good one.  I don't
suppose you could give us a rough idea of when to
expect it?

You'd have to ask Jeff.  He's doing it.

 

Not really a comment, but it's been so long since I 
read SM Z that I'm not sure who is who, and what has 
gone before.  I don't really have time to read them


Iya.  We now have a Reader's Guide at:

http://www.dkcomm.net/rhea/Stories/Z/Reader.html

Which I hope will help people.


all 
over again, but what I have done is use Real Players
"Text Aloud" program to have my computer read the
stories aloud while I'm working around the house. 

Cool!


John Walter Biles :  MA-History, ABD, Ph.D Candidate at U. Kansas         
ranma@falcon.cc.ukans.edu       
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from the world.  Theoretically, I handle millions of dollars a day, 
but it is less real than this e-mail. I have never seen our product. 
I have never seen the sales people.  I have never seen a customer."
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