Don Granberry wrote:
As was her habit, Ko Lon rose well before sunup on
Thursday morning. She liked the quiet of the very early
morning. It as invigorating to sit and listen to a great
^^
It was invigorating
monster like Tokyo wake up. The only sounds to be heard when
she first got up would be the occasional bark of a dog and
the prowling garbage trucks. Shortly after that the, one
^^^
Unnecessary 'the' I think.
"Yes. I can only do so much. This is a case where you
will have to do most of the healing on your own. I can help,
but only so much. Most of it will be up to you."
These four sentences would probably flow better as two, it's really
repetitive. Maybe just drop the last sentence entirely.
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Other than those three things I didn't notice anything I would
consider needing to be fixed, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading the story.
THANK YOU for writing it! :)