Subject: [FFML] Re: [Fanfic][Tenchi]Sketches of Tenchi 6: Tearful Tru e Confessions
From: "Miller, Bert" <bert.miller@unisys.com>
Date: 8/14/2000, 5:05 PM
To: "'DB Sommer'" <sommer@3rdm.net>
CC: ffml@fanfic.com

D.B. Sommer wrote:
Bert Miller wrote:
Sketches of Tenchi 6:  Tearful True Confessions

Oh, I can just imagine how tearful and true they will be with 
the way this fic has been going.. :)

But of course... ;)

A number of the newly-arrived fiancee corps watched from the door.
Youshou himself was nowhere to be seen.

Smart man, but  I don't think even he can run fast or far 
enough this time.

Heh.


"Will you return the Lady Fuyuno to stand trial?" asked Kiyone.

"No, you can't have her back!"  Yuzuha snarled.  "She's my
plaything!"

"Under what circumstances," persisted Kiyone, "did Lady Fuyuno
enter your realm?  Was it voluntary or involuntary?"

Why would Yuzuha care? She's not exactly the sort that plays 
by the rules.

Yuzuha wouldn't care, but it makes a difference to Kiyone (at
least to the police report she can't help thinking about writing...)
 

"Tenchi, our options are narrowing.  Either you marry Yuzuha (and
this can be in name only, of course), or Mayuka will be forever
branded as illegitimate."

Given who her mother is, I doubt Mayuka would feel bad about it. :P

Well, perhaps not.  OTOH, all of Jurai now knows her mother, either
way.  Might as well get the benefits of legitimacy...


Aeka offered placatingly, "We have already had six depart.  Five
because of yesterday's attack, plus Milady Fuyuno's
disappearance."

What's to stop more from appearing later on though? :)

Heh.  What indeed?

Washuu returned to her lab and inspected the captives with which
her guard-bots presented her.  "Oh, just you three.  I was hoping
I could actually catch Mihoshi this time.

Yeah. Right. Now who's kidding who?

Hope springs eternal...

"...and then the mean laughing woman disappeared, but she left me
wearing this yucky blonde wig and tacky clothes.  That's when I
woke up."

"Well, Misao,

* Sigh*

On the next revision, I'm going to make that "yucky blonde wig and
tacky purple leather miniskirt."


"And what was Tenchi doing to her, the pervert?"  In a lower
voice, Asuka continued, "I bet he's a pervert just like all boys!"

Nah. He's gay and can't admit it, lest all of the girls kill 
him outright.
:)

Boy, wouldn't they just?

"You know, running his fingers over her chest and sides."

Rei took this moment to observe, "Mihoshi is from the planet
Daikyou, is she not?"  Addressed ostensibly to Sasami, Rei gave
Asuka a significant look as she said this.

And what does that mean?

"Daikyou" just means "big chest", more or less.  The point is
that Rei is reminding Asuka of the details of Mihoshan biology,
as we learned it in ep. 4, specifically the effect of the 'tickling'
(recap:  lotsa sensitive, erogenous zone nerve endings on her chest).
Clearly this part was _way_ too sneaky, however.


"WHAT?  How are we supposed to compete with one of those balloon-
breasted women?"

By using charm, of course. Which leaves Asuka out. :)

Yep!

In the yard, some of the more martially inclined newcomers used
Azaka and Kamidake for target practice.  The latter stoically
endured the blue paint and white caps with which they'd been
decorated.

Heh. Nice imagery.

Thanks!


"Indeed," agreed Pikko.  "One of whom is the long-missing Prince
Youshou.  Unmarried, and closer to the throne."

About time someone considered that.

We can't have Youshou getting away scot-free, now can we? ;)


Teruzi closed her eyes momentarily.  "Yes... It is Youshou's
office.  Kiyone pictures an old but still active man, a bit like
both your fathers, but older.  Kiyone hasn't seen or heard of him
since we arrived."  Teruzi paused, then continued.  "I don't sense
Prince Youshou anywhere in the vicinity, but he might be
shielded."

Or he might have run, like he always does when marriage comes 
a knocking.

Well, either way, the question is, can he get away?


"Can you get them to keep watch?  If he is still here, he might
not think to hide himself from your pets," ventured Shiria.

"Who would?  As a scientist," the amused Pikko commented, "I still
find those mystifying creatures quite baffling."

Have we seen those creatures yet, or is that to come?

We haven't seen them (at least, in this series!). :)
[Hint:  There are nine, and they're about Ryou-oh-ki's size.]

They'll probably show up next episode.

  Orange, smoking blooddrops ate
holes in her uniform.  A red bow tie, clearly labeled "Made by
Washuu", fell on to her nose.  "Great.  Poohbares instead.  Very
funny, Washuu."

So the trio did at least get to tag Washuu's pets.

And, of course, all the rest of the fiancees have seen this as
well...

"And 'ol Aeka-hime was coming on to Tenchi like you wouldn't
believe!" Ryouko asserted, waving her sake bottle around at her
eager listeners.  Several angled their necklaces or earrings for
better reception.

Heh. this is promising.

Imagine Aeka's face when she hears about this leak... :)

I am very
sorry that I was not better for you than I was.  I could not
know; nor, I believe, could Ryouko, that her effort would
send us both into epileptic shock and unconsciousness."

Hehehehehe. great punchline.

I liked it. :)

THE END (for now).

Yeah. It had better be 'for now'

Oh, I have full plans to keep going and resolve every dangling
thread (assuming I remember all of them!).


Humor was good, and a tad more subdued. But it worked for me.

Good.

A few spelling errors at the start, but I failed to find any
later.  Nice work and already looking forward to more.

Errors noted.  Thanks for writing, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!



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